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4th and 21
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4th and 21 |
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desperado Member
since 1999-05-24
Posts 312FT Hood,Tx 
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its fourth and twenty-one a long road to haul yet still not done the pressure intense and pulling me down can't get my feet up off of the ground I'm stuck in a way that few can describe trapped in a hole and I'm burried alive can't get my arm extended enough colder than hell and yet twice as tough fourth and twenty-one but who's keeping score it's tied to the end and I'm stuck on the floor no plays to call, I can't pull one out nothings been working, can't scream and shout 4th and 21, a long way to go 4th and 21 how am I to know that the choices I make will leave me behind open or closed like a three of a kind 4th down and 21 years still remain my clock still knows how to maintain halfway down the final stride halfway down the falling side in the middle of the race I'm stopping here cause I no longer care who sees me here |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
well, des, you're writing some simon and dylan and oh what the hell, who's the they who keep score since there's winning to tell but there's no competition, you're long down the field while the rest of here in the bleachers will yield to the touchdown you've landed inside of our souls while the refferee's whistle blows out of control since we're famished for substance and then you appear, your words just like remedy inside our ear and all this is to say, though it might not be clear, that your poetry speaks to the everywhere near in our insides so damaged because of the plight of the world and so kiddo, i must say goodnight but before i send kisses blown off of my hand, just accept sincere thank yous and please understand that respect for your writing is written in gold on my heart from the start of forever's unfold, and this piece, you sweet soldier, speaks all that you are from the big heart of texas to the shooting of stars... and you are, you know, yes, james, you are yes you know... a star lighting halos of light on the show.... and friend, this is writing that's so appropot!!!!!! ---------- hehe.. all that rhymed btw but you knew that... and just let me say this .... *s m i l e*.... luvya!!! [This message has been edited by doreen peri (edited 10-07-2001).] |
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Masked Intruder
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Senior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets |
Hey James, how's the weather over there? Indian summer rocking the midwest right now. I don't really have anything to say about your thoughts. I think you already pretty much know what I'd say. If you don't, then you're not thinking hard enough. *grins* It's nice to see you around, though, I guess I haven't really been around to notice ya. hehe Back to work. Catch ya later, bro. -me You can't wake a person who is pretending to be asleep. -- Navajo Proverb |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
This one gripped me from beginning to end, des... now I'm counting on a perfect Hail Mary pass into the endzone! *S* Great work! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
This left me feeling that no matter what we do or how many times we go over the game plan, chances are we still can't win for losing. Nice write!! |
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The Lady of Shallot Senior Member
since 2001-10-03
Posts 818USA |
this is nice ! -befriend yourself and you will never be alone- |
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