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desperado Member
since 1999-05-24
Posts 312FT Hood,Tx 
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forgive me I failed though right now I don't seem to care it's over it's gone I'm lost like I've always been yet I'm free now to admit it forgive me I'm evil soft and sweet on the outside yet poisoned underneath addictive and cancerous all at once you don't want me forgive me I'm selfish I don't want your issues or baggage my hands are full with mine and I don't want to share cause I'm too proud forgive me I'm worthless can't pay the bills my mouth purchases broke and twisted lost and confused I'm nothing you really want or can use cause I'm ugly forgive me it's over forgive me I failed forgive me I'm evil forgive me I'm selfish forgive me I'm worthless cause I'm ugly cause I'm proud you don't want me yet now I'm free to admit it forgive me I'm dying inside forgive me I'm dead |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
wow, very intense....I like this |
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Moon Dust
since 1999-06-11
Posts 2177Skelmersdale, UK |
wow ok I just dont know what to say except well written I breathe the dust, the dust is me. |
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The Lady of Shallot Senior Member
since 2001-10-03
Posts 818USA |
forgive me I'm evil soft and sweet on the outside yet poisoned underneath addictive and cancerous all at once you don't want me" very intense. It's hard to think someone could be this way, sometimes they are and they don't want to be. Very intense. |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Well I don't know what to say except for, it's powerful and emotional and great writing  Maree. |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
i forgive you!!!!!!!!*wink* is it still over???? lol hey you!! you come ALIVE in this! great lines here, my scrabbled friend quote: lemme ask you this... are you absolutely SURE, you haven't been sneaking a peak at themes from my notes? hehe.... i know i said a paraphrase of this some time or another... geesh great write, first class!!! (you'll always be first class in my book, no matter what *grin) |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
it's hard to come to grips with these feelings. . . you're beginning. . . well done. . . -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Well said, you spoke for so many people here: "forgive me I'm selfish I don't want your issues or baggage my hands are full with mine and I don't want to share cause I'm too proud" |
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Nan
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
I forgive ya too, cuz you're my scrambled friend too... You're not so bad, ya know...  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
desperado--this is destressing to read..and powerful with emotion. I hope you're alright. |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Powerful stuff. I hear yah. You should have been here last night...we were all in this mood (well. Some of us were). Tough write, very well expressed. If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Masked Intruder
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Senior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets |
Yer too far away to hit, so I'll just say that yer doin good in the writin world. How's you in the real world? Good to see ya, bro. Catch ya around. You can't wake a person who is pretending to be asleep. -- Navajo Proverb |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
Well, your writing is intense in its usual way. I enjoyed the power and honesty in this a lot, Des. Its great as always to see your writing here. Take care of you. *Jenn* Sometimes the heart needs the solace of solitude and silence. |
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Saxoness
since 1999-07-18
Posts 1102Texas |
I forgive you for pain I forgive you for sorrow But how can I let go again and give away tomorrow? There was so much to say and so much to hide and by losing today you kept all your pride. I've cried all I cared to I've screamed all I could And though I still love you perhaps I'm no good. I'm missing my classes I'm missing my meals Can I live till it passes I'll die before this heals I wake up sobbing I go to sleep in tears my friends have all left me They can't calm my fears My heart lives in snow and trust long ago died So I want you to know you're not the only one dead inside. "Glory remains unaware of my neglected dwelling where alone |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
When you are forgiven, you begin to live again, but you first have to forgive yourself. Kathleen |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Desperado~ I found that the intensity reached in and 'hit me with both barrels'~ 'forgive me I'm worthless can't pay the bills my mouth purchases' Wow ... reaching deep with this one~ ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Wow. Incredibly strong write here Desperado. Nothing to improve in this one. Dee I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
First we must forgive ourselves. This is a great read. Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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