Open Poetry #16 |
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It was marvelous to have loved you |
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The Lady of Shallot Senior Member
since 2001-10-03
Posts 818USA |
It was marvelous to have loved you- Time stilled between every breath. I imagined dreaming next to you caught yet free…. It was marvelous to touch you, shirt open, eyes closed, fingers stroking, tongues exploring. Yes, marvelous. Through midnight rain and morning dew there was delight passing through our flesh, as lightning across a desert sky. Your words fell into my arms and I enfolded every syllable. We were everything simple and all things complex and we paraphrased one another. It was marvelous to have loved you but my legs dangle now, over the bed frame. My fingers drop the pen. My tears cake dry and words cease. But in those final sentences, it would have been more merciful not to have ever written them. [This message has been edited by The Lady of Shallot (edited 10-08-2001).] |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
This piece is so heartbreaking, yet beautiful. I love this! Sending this to the top so perhaps others may enjoy as much as I did. ~Hugs, NancyLee~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Yes it's nice to have those feelings of love stirred up and we can only hope that feelings will be mutual...in fact they are sometimes not...James |
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A Whisper's Caress Senior Member
since 2000-11-03
Posts 791on the horizon of a fairytale |
more merciful not to have evr written them? no, once the ache ceases, you will have such beautiful thoughts to replay. Poetic verse nestled in the warmth of my heart, reveals the sweet yearnings of my soul.... |
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Interloper![]() ![]()
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Sadly beautiful work. Great expression of feelings and imagery. Well done! ![]() [This message has been edited by Interloper (edited 10-08-2001).] |
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Sven![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
'tis true that broken hearts inspire more than the heart in love. . . well done. . . --------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Nightshade![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
It was marvelous just to read this. Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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The Lady of Shallot Senior Member
since 2001-10-03
Posts 818USA |
Thank you for your replies, I failed to bring across the meaning of the last few stanzas but I wrote this with too much emotion. Perhaps in the future I will redo it and make the meaning clearer. I sometimes fail to do that! |
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