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Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

0 posted 2001-10-04 09:02 AM

Settling
one mote at a time
the cloud hazed so long
on landscaped thought
begins to settle
as I stand immobile
for fear of stirring
with even soft tread
the dust of you

Entombed here
with epitaph reading
little into the truth
of all that lies beneath

I have too few tears
to turn these plains to mud
but enough to cut small
rivulets of escape
into these layers now formed

Who will lay flowers
In honor on the grave
of this memory?

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

1 posted 2001-10-04 09:05 AM

Cpat hair,
Excellent write, beautifully done. This is a keeper.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

2 posted 2001-10-04 09:07 AM

In Your Honor

Nan

Administrator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

3 posted 2001-10-04 09:40 AM

Sunshine shall lay her lilies before you...

This is wonderful, Capt...

The Lady of Shallot
Senior Member

since 2001-10-03

Posts 818
USA

4 posted 2001-10-04 10:00 AM

This is really very good!

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

5 posted 2001-10-04 10:47 AM

Cpat Hair...Beautifully penned my friend.
Enjoyed and into my library it goes. ~Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So that you won't ever forget me.~

SmittenKitten
Senior Member

since 2001-06-20

Posts 1131
where the sky and horizon meet

6 posted 2001-10-04 11:03 AM

Cpat~ What a touching write...quit pulling my heart-strings! Seriously though, this was beautiful. And the title is perfect.

Hugs,
~Krista

Your beautiful words & creativity allow me to connect with the same in myself.
Thank you for having the courage to share yourself so that I can too

sunshinemist
Senior Member

since 2001-09-29

Posts 595
Fl. sunshines early mist

7 posted 2001-10-04 11:06 AM

Cpat,

A beautiful write. Well done! Thank you.

Warm smiles,
~Marie~

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

8 posted 2001-10-04 01:03 PM

Entombed here
with epitaph reading
little into the truth
of all that lies beneath

I have too few tears
to turn these plains to mud
but enough to cut small
rivulets of escape
into these layers now formed
===============================

Superb writing Captain...
masterful employ of imagery and vocabulary,
also the succinctity added to this ones impact and haunted dark egdes.
well done poet sir!!
jm

We're all feeding our lonely ... like it might go away,
Like the doors of heaven will swing wide ... if we just find the right words to say.

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

9 posted 2001-10-04 01:27 PM

Ron, doggone it, this iz gettin' plumb embarrassin'. I think I'll just put my pen away and just read your work, among others, which makes me feel inadequate

Twilight Myst
Member

since 2001-10-04

Posts 58
Just A Myst At Twilight

10 posted 2001-10-04 01:51 PM

Dang, this is splendid writing indeed!!

Bravo...

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

11 posted 2001-10-04 08:40 PM

enjoy

Logan
Senior Member

since 2001-05-28

Posts 1641
Arkansas

12 posted 2001-10-04 08:56 PM

Geez, Cpat, this is wonderful. You really did a job here, very well done..gentle smile

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

13 posted 2001-10-04 09:10 PM

I like this lots. Very nice writing, some great usage of phrases.
Sandra

rwood
Member Elite

since 2000-02-29

Posts 3793
Tennessee

14 posted 2001-10-05 06:54 AM

Wow!...Very Macbeth of you C. Very talented and deep few verse. Diving right to the source of the matter. Enjoyed immensely.

Sincerely,
Regina

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