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Professor Gloom
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of Depression

0 posted 2001-10-03 02:21 PM


“Double, double toil and trouble;
Fire burn, and cauldron bubble.”*


You stir me,
Under the fullness of moon,
Slow stirring
You’re mixing,
Emotions risen too soon,
Gone the fears
Of past years
Where I simmered far too long,
You stir me,
With beauty
And lyrical voice like song,
Fire burns
And a stewing heart yearns.

Gloom


*Macbeth Act 4 scene 1, W. Shakespheare



© Copyright 2001 Aszard Drazlom - All Rights Reserved
Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
1 posted 2001-10-03 02:24 PM



Good.  Very, very good.

Gentle Spirit
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since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989

2 posted 2001-10-03 02:25 PM


Beautiful words from your pen today Gloom.  I did enjoy this glimpse into this not so gloomy side of you.  Well written.
Donna

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

(I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~Garth)

[This message has been edited by Gentle Spirit (edited 10-03-2001).]

Professor Gloom
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of Depression
3 posted 2001-10-03 02:40 PM


Thank you, Sunshine,
I am pleased you enjoyed.

Thank you, Gentle Spirit,
Not sure what you mean by
“this side”, but pleased you liked these words.

Gloom

Cpat Hair
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4 posted 2001-10-03 02:43 PM


yes.... this is good... a nice use of image and metaphor... I enjoyed!

Honeybee
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Ontario, CANADA
5 posted 2001-10-03 04:55 PM



An awesome write.  The rhyme and flow and use of a metaphor is perfect! Very clever, real and lovely!  

Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

Zinsser
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since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641
Calif.
6 posted 2001-10-03 05:29 PM


Very Very nice....
~Connie~

A Whisper's Caress
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on the horizon of a fairytale
7 posted 2001-10-03 05:31 PM


I really do like this....

May your dreams always dance to the rhythm of a lover's heartbeat...

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