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Rotting Apples
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Rotting Apples |
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AniKay83 Member
since 2000-06-28
Posts 388Missing Since 1999 
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If I gave you an apple, would you feed me an orange? If I took my life, would you give me yours in return? These hallucinations are not my own. I was never that creative. But I was the best at faking it. And you have to be following me! How else could you explain that I can't get your smell off my clothes or your fingerprints off my throat? So, stop following me! My heart could use some room to die and you never pick up enough speed to call it a chase, anyway. I know you don't deserve my tears and I don't intend to give them to you. Only cry in front of you. Rub it in your face that I'm sad and you can't do a damned thing about it. HA! Actually, I woudn't know 'cause you never tried... But I would still like to make you feel bad! I'll take pity over indifference, any day... 'Cause your ignorance is amazing at best. That "meant to be" missing from "we" circles your head in constant motion. But you stay still- play dead or deaf or both. Hell, we're already dead. We're just too lazy to rot. So, if I fed you an apple, would you still eat my orange? And since you took my life, will you give yours in return? ~Krissie "No one has ever loved |
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Temptress
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
This has a very interesting statement or two attached to it. Very well stated. I enjoyed.  Sometimes the heart needs the solace of solitude and silence. |
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The Lady of Shallot Senior Member
since 2001-10-03
Posts 818USA |
I know this feeling all too well. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Hell, we're already dead. We're just too lazy to rot.-- I like this especially. A sad poem of anger and resignation both, but wonderfully expressed. Enjoyed. |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Yes...clear indignation...It is scary how we rot in the barrel of our lives sometimes. I hope things are looking more peachy these days! A very strong write.Sincerely, Regina |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Oh wow, is this ever a good write. Strong words and feelings and you never pick up enough speed to call it a chase, anyway Hell, we're already dead. We're just too lazy to rot Just a couple of my favorite lines. But really, I thought the whole poem was amazingly well done If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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LngJhnAg Member Elite
since 1999-07-23
Posts 3508Boot+Kitty=Poetry in motion |
This poem has a lot of emotion in it - I like that ability to express feelings so they come out. On a lighter side - Are we men really supposed to chase you gals? I caught my Lorelei, and she doesn't seem to want to get away. How can I keep chasing her when she refuses to run? lol |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
I've decided that I'm not too lazy to rot. . . but that I am perhaps to lazy to ripen. . . great job here, I love the way it just falls onto the page. . . -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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AniKay83 Member
since 2000-06-28
Posts 388Missing Since 1999 |
Thanks for all the replies. To Sven particularly~ I haven't been around for awhile, but congrats on being Newsletter Editor! I don't think anyone else could do a better job! ~Krissie "No one has ever loved |
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