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Open Poetry #16

Stygian Nights

Masked Intruder

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since 1999-05-23

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Near golden sunsets

0 posted 2001-09-20 02:53 AM

I’ve fallen asleep upon this weary boat,
drifting in lonely aphony,
the waves my only voice.

Lost in lucubration; thoughts swaying to and fro
to the rhythm of the rocking,
dying and fading with the setting sun.

Stygian Nights become unwanted comfort,
losing myself amidst the black water,
the black sky, my black thoughts.

Dark clouds build upon my brow,
upon the horizon lightning dances
as my weary boat draws near

Nature’s dictum roars across the water;
hell’s fury unleashing painful relief
taking me quickly

to rest in softer waters.

You can't wake a person who is pretending to be asleep. -- Navajo Proverb

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2001-09-20 02:58 AM

ohhhhh,
this is awesome

love the ending

Nan

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Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-20

Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA

2 posted 2001-09-20 08:10 AM

You weather the storm well, m'friend..

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

3 posted 2001-09-20 08:25 AM

what a very cool poem...
excellent employ of imagery, metaphor and vocab,
and the soft alliterations are noted as well.
Ya had me from the title ....
very well done poet sir

Well tomorrow holds only mystery
And who's to say what might be
But in you I found a love so strong
The sun and the moon looked on in jealousy

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

4 posted 2001-09-20 08:39 AM

Masked,
Agree With JM, well done.

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

5 posted 2001-09-20 01:24 PM

I'd like to drift awhile.....enjoyed the words, the thoughts and the soft ending

~Wynter

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

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Canada eh.

6 posted 2001-09-20 02:45 PM

Great write...enjoyed!

~Time has cast a spell on you
so you won't ever forget me~

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