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Topheth
Member

since 2001-09-08

Posts 297
Texas

0 posted 2001-09-19 11:03 PM

Your Nature

Like a harvest moon,
your bright eyes dispel
the haunting darkness
of my spirits
as your voice whispers
through these lone limbs,
a gentle insistence
which stirs my stoic soul.
And when your smile
spreads forth
like the morning dawn,
it lifts the fog from my mind,
renewing those prayers
to feel once again
your sea-wave hair
of sun sprinkled sparkles
curling over my empty shore
as your kissing fireworks
explode in the void
surrounding my heart.
Your charms are overwhelming
like a midnight star-filled sky
impossible to count.
I cannot escape your touch;
I could jump
from the highest mountain
and know it’s you
pulling me back.

[This message has been edited by Topheth (edited 09-19-2001).]

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

1 posted 2001-09-19 11:19 PM

Oh my! Yes! I love it...I mean , um, it is really great!
Oh those eyes...er, rhymes.

~Time has cast a spell on you
so you won't ever forget me~

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

2 posted 2001-09-20 12:08 PM

(told you no one can say no to those eyes

)

I can't pick my favorite part of this *sigh*
all of it works for me

very romantic
I liked this very much

Dee
Member Elite

since 2000-08-19

Posts 2330
Queensland, Australia

3 posted 2001-09-20 05:25 AM

Topheth, this is enough to make any girl swoon

Very smooth and romantic, loved it.

Dee

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

4 posted 2001-09-20 09:02 AM

Your charms are overwhelming
like a midnight star-filled sky
impossible to count.
I cannot escape your touch;
I could jump
from the highest mountain
and know it’s you
pulling me back.
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Beautiful free verse of devotion...
excellent employ of imagery and comparisons of nature to define your emotions...
romantic and passionate write poet sir.
very well done
jm

Well tomorrow holds only mystery
And who's to say what might be
But in you I found a love so strong
The sun and the moon looked on in jealousy

Apachecat906
Member

since 2001-09-04

Posts 217
Michigan, USA