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A Typed Relationship
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A Typed Relationship |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines 
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A Typed Relationship Sorted letters from A to Z a typed relationship, are We. Arranged and cast to mold in space with lines between the words in place. My jumbled thoughts are set apart transcribed, in code, from naked heart. Styled to share my love of thee as typed relationship, have We. Complex, the art that occupies each moments wake, each words disguise. Planted words so carefully a typed relationship, are We. Joined by lines, expression phrased these measured feelings, morning raised. Formed of letters from A to Z in typed relationship, are We. Marked by boundaries and in-betweens of rhyming thoughts upon a screen, who would have thought that this would be a typed relationship, of We. ~Wynter, "The worst prison would be a closed heart". |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Marked by boundaries and in-betweens of rhyming thoughts upon a screen, who would have thought that this would be a typed relationship, of We. ========================== this is clever write of theme, word play and rhyme.... on a topic many will relate to... "cyber love" has become a way of day to day life, we have replaced real touch with fingers on keys and gazing at blue screens.. personally it leaves me feeling sad, E for Empty L for lonely signed M for Mothy Me  Well tomorrow holds only mystery |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I loved how you did this  very creative |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
sometimes the relationships are as real on here as if in real..don't discount that or the possibilities of having met in real..but I was writing about having to type words so carefully making sure they aren't misunderstood as they don't come with inflections... just trying to stay writing I guess... thank you Janet Nice to see you, Sea..thank you ~Wynter |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Wynter, As JM said cute and well done, enjoyed. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Wynter~ Well ... I've seen your 'typing' for over three years now~ Never missed an 'inflection' yet. Continue to tell it like it is, sweet poet friend~  Actually, I thought this was a tad brilliant~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Sy, sometimes, I surprise myself...in the cute dept...thank you, glad you could enjoy it...it's been hard to write of anything lately. Marge, I know, it's hard to believe..I thought it was just the other day that you told me it was two years ago...my life is sometimes in slow motion moving too fast if you can understand that...somehow I believe you can..*s brilliant??? what's that...I think I went into the dictionary and kept looking up words that I thought fit the theme...and then let my mind do the rest... hugs back ~smiling Maureen "The worst prison would be a closed heart". |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Caressing keys, massaging words, here whispered breeze and trilling birds. A sculpted phrase, a gift of poem, here soothing praise another home. |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
unfortunately, a typed relationship is usually not as fulfilling as the real thing. I enjoyed this, very creative. Kathleen |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Quoting wynter: "having to type words so carefully making sure they aren't misunderstood as they don't come with inflections" ============================= and so my words arent misunderstood (I already got an email asking what I meant) I dont ever discount the emotions nor the "realness" ... I know all too well how intense these relationships can be, I'm a moth, remember I wasnt putting down "cyber-love" All I meant was for me personally after awhile typed words in place of real contact creates a void of longing, no matter how intense, it cant(nor should it) replace the feeling of that person being there one on one. Real Touch beats typing anytime Just me speaking only for me. So see Wynters poem's point is proven true... the typed word is often interpretated differently from it intend. excellent poem jm Well tomorrow holds only mystery |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
I REALLY enjoyed this write! Thank you. ~Time has cast a spell on you |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
RSWells such a nice gathering of keys...a very soothing touch you have..~Smiling a thank you Kathleen.. I know what you mean *s Janet Marie I knew exactly what you meant..I am sorry you were emailed...and actually I wasn't talking cyber-love per se, for some the only means of keeping in touch regularly is through the keyboard...and yes...the longing is there to touch in real, to see the eyes, one on one. thank you again for the excellent. Enchantress Thank you for your kind response ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Wynter, I really enjoyed this. Made me think and you are right. So many times we write something but it is taken in the wrong context. Face to face is so much better but we can't always do that. If I only had "real" friends, for want of a better word , I would lose so much. The typed contact will have to do until I can afford to visit some of them though.  Dee I wish you every happiness and may you always have the best of the good things in life. a brand |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
wonderful Wynter. . . it's amazing what words can do. . . and what they can't do. . . great job. . . -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Bilby Junior Member
since 2001-07-31
Posts 14Northern Territory, Australia |
Interpretations, inflections, a good point to ponder over ... human miscommunication is a fascinating area. The poem has a neat rhythm and lightness of touch that doesn't let it get bogged down. cheers, Alan |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
You've woven the hardest part...and the best part of the "typed relationship"...we have the freedom to say what we are thinking the responsibility to mean what we type...much to ponder excellent write~ |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
nakdthoughts- This is excellent! I really enjoyed how you did this. Wonderfully done, my friend. Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Dee ...typed contact is the next best thing..or maybe a phone call is, although more expensive. I hope you get to see some of your friends in real..*s Sven...yes just amazing...thank you Alan..thank you for your response. I think many people ponder over misinterpretations, perhaps sometimes too late. I like rhythm thank you, and if I ever bog you down just say the word.*s Bdc... thank you for your thoughtful response ..nice to see you back again *s ~Vicky..glad you enjoyed my play at words...and thank you for the hugs...could use them today ...((hugs)) back ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". |
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