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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
This morning I looked at my hand focusing hard tuning out the other voices my hand touching your face for the first time taking pen to write of sensation believed known until this moment my hand touching love was a fool waiting for you |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Duncan, will it be "known" or "unknown" in the line "believed known"?? [This message has been edited by faterider (edited 11-13-2001).] |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
my hand touching love was a fool waiting for you I believe that this just sums it up, we so often feel a fool after having waited for love.......but sooner or later it does show up. Beautiful write Duncan. On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
  This is really beautiful. |
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A Whisper's Caress Senior Member
since 2000-11-03
Posts 791on the horizon of a fairytale |
well, you have this reader all aflutter..... so so lovely Duncan. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Perfect. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
believed known until this moment my hand touching love was a fool waiting for you ======================= just have to smile at the cleverness and sincerety of this one Duncan... the intent and impact are written to concise, succinct perfection. what a very very cool poem well done poet sir.  You're the hidden cost and the thing that's lost in everything I do. |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
Writing while waiting for her your hand was not such a fool afterall Simply love it Duncan, it's just beautiful Titia A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* I wonder if I am a fool for waiting for love. This poem made me sit back and wonder...maybe I am but I cannot help but believe somewhere there may be love for me. Very well done, Duncan. Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
You can keep love eternal in poems( that's what I love about writing in a way its like creating or making love, material. I love this poem because I relate so much. Thanks. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big huggssssssss) Oh Duncan, I feel just the same way; I wonder if I'm always a fool to think if I will ever be loved, like I am just a sad dreamer and I'll never fall in love, or if this love is real. (sigh) My heart goes out to you, but I believe deep down the true love is just around the corner, who will happily take your hand and have this first dance with you to last eternally! (smiles) Such powerful thoughts, sweet friend, we all love you very much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Duncan, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
So very poetically well said....Aren't we all this at one point of our lives or another? |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
This is truly original and haunting, it's very lovely... Kathleen |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
*sigh*, another stunning beauty from you.It made my heart skip a little with the emotion in it. I think I'm going to print it off and take it to Savannah with me. Are ya surprised to hear from me here in Tampa? I'm using my colleagues computer and just had to quick sign in to tell you how much I loved this. Til Sunday... If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
simple and full of emotion beautiful...... Thanks for sharing this with all of us |
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Accordionmaid Member
since 2001-10-28
Posts 153MA/USA |
a beautiful poem... |
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