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Open Poetry #16

This whirldwind called me

walker
Member Elite

since 2001-02-11

Posts 2240
Florida

0 posted 2001-11-13 07:51 AM

My soul
it's an unclear bucket
of thoughts
It's not palpable
it can't be seen
But it's my core
it keeps me together
when I walk alone
My spirit
has invisible wings
it takes me places
where I never been
Some very scary
shadows of myself
But mostly places
where I meet my peace
My passion
it can be tricky
it shows my love
in its grandeur
But it also
draws very thin lines
in which love and lust
have slept side by side
My self
it has known God
but at times cried
for losing faith
But it has survived
unholy land
And it's created
what hope
to be a better person
in this whirldwind
called me

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

1 posted 2001-11-13 08:09 AM

What a lovely whirlwind it is!! I adored this one, now to tuck it into the treasure box. *s*

On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

(I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~Garth)

Apachecat906
Member

since 2001-09-04

Posts 217
Michigan, USA

2 posted 2001-11-13 08:44 AM

I can't seem to find anything wrong with this one (i'm in a critical mood I guess) I really liked this poem, and I cant pick out a favorite line cuz they all work so well.

Go ahead, push your luck; find out how much love the world can hold

Startime
Member Ascendant

since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

3 posted 2001-11-13 09:25 AM

Oh, BRAVO!!!Magnificent. I love it. I am glad to know a little of the whirlwind that is you.

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

4 posted 2001-11-13 09:28 AM

Walker,
A good write, I enjoyed the read.

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

5 posted 2001-11-13 10:11 AM

BRAVO!!! Yes you are, and your loving heart is a whirlwind of lovely emotions and visions and magic! (smiles) You always share such lovely visions, I LOVE IT!!! (kiss on cheek) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Walker, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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