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arthur
Senior Member

since 2001-08-14

Posts 678
england

0 posted 2001-11-11 04:32 PM

stress
Do not shout or I will break
In little pieces on the floor
Peace for my own minds sake
Or let me be no more

I can feel the trembling
In hands and brow
Let us cease dissembling
Destroy me know!

My hands shake
Could i but sleep
Ever and ever awake
O, let me sleep!

Let me cease to be
Give me peace
Let my eyes no longer see
Give me release

arthur

Enchantress
Member Empyrean

since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

1 posted 2001-11-11 04:37 PM

Very interesting write Arthur!
Left me pondering.

Good work!
Hugs across the pond. ~Nancy~

~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before.~

Irish Rose
Member Patricius

since 2000-04-06

Posts 10263

2 posted 2001-11-11 04:39 PM

Michael,

yes, I know this feeling....

constructive critique, you know it's a matter of choice, I guess, but I find a poem comes together if you don't capitalize the beginning of every line unless it's a new sentence.

Just my 2 cents.

Kathleen
nickname "Kay"
also wrote as The Lady of Shallot
"be true to yourself"

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

3 posted 2001-11-11 04:46 PM

"Do not shout or I will break
In little pieces on the floor
Peace for my own minds sake
Or let me be no more"

Shouting, even for Peace,
is not very peaceful or calming.
I enjoyed the read.
Peace and hugs to you
today and every day.

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

4 posted 2001-11-11 07:21 PM

Well, this sounds so close to how I feel every day, especially that part about breaking from the shouting. Stress sure is a torturous part of our lies. You pulled the feelings out very well here.
Sandra

Startime
Member Ascendant

since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

5 posted 2001-11-11 07:32 PM

Well, I can only say that I can't let you have peace because your words are too good. More please. This is a wonderful piece of writing.

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

6 posted 2001-11-11 08:38 PM

(sigh) Oh Arthur, I know this feeling ever so well, and pray you will feel peace and relaxation again! (sigh) My heart goes out to you, dearest friend! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Tracey
Member Elite

since 2001-08-29

Posts 2808
where insanity meets breeding

7 posted 2001-11-11 09:58 PM

Stressful day huh Michael? Sure sounds like it. Here's a smile to brighten it up

. Now get in that MG and cheer up. I always find it brightens my mood!! Good to see you here again

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

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