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--- Composing Love ---
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA 
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Composing Love  Expelled from heaven's harmony, thrown from love's euphony memories are killing me on muted chords of misery ~ 'Tis refrain of sorrow's strain lost in love of silent pain, my voice is flat...it breathes off-key soprano screams are coating me ~ Beethoven of heart, takes a bow - deaf by an aching soul's plea; the ebony cream of it's piano bleeds tears from every key... it's inner beauty is hollow in a-minor of misery ~ In the depth of hell, I dwell blue rhythm is haunting me, notes swirl not in morning tea unable to wake from misery, the music of dreams are locked away and lyrics of passion die, alas, there's nothing to say smudging the lines in cry, and, destiny hides from day for unfinished lullaby ~ Life is a song, no time to rehearse and every verse becomes my curse longing to immerse my entire worth to finally feel a love that's real and give my heart re-birth ~ Yet, I'll embrace the grace of second chance of hope and wishes of pure romance, leaping in love in dance, enchant on a dove of Cupid's grant ~ Layers unpeel, so, I can heal faith sings again in tune, surreal with hand to pen so, I can heal to write a love ever real By Melissa P. Monette   |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
This is astonishingly beautiful for a painful melody. The way you put words together never ceases to amaze me. This is another outstanding piece by you. I hope that ever real love comes to you soon If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Melissa, OOooooOooo .. this is definately one of my favorites. You are just SO good. The presentation is wonderful. You're amazing chickie  Hugs, Tara |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Melissa.....Melissa......all I can say is wow and that in real money is priceless poetry, no contest......everything! Kathleen |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Expelled from heaven's harmony, thrown from love's euphony memories are killing me on muted chords of misery ~ 'Tis refrain of sorrow's strain lost in love of silent pain, my voice is flat...it breathes off-key soprano screams are coating me ~ Beethoven of heart, takes a bow - deaf by an aching soul's plea; the ebony cream of it's piano bleeds tears from every key... it's inner beauty is hollow in a-minor of misery ~ In the depth of hell, I dwell blue rhythm is haunting me, notes swirl not in morning tea unable to wake from misery, the music of dreams are locked away and lyrics of passion die, alas, there's nothing to say smudging the lines in cry, and, destiny hides from day for unfinished lullaby ~ =============================== my goodness Melis ..this is fantastic writing... youve penned a symphony of emotions in classic Melissa style... this just aches and bleeds off the page girlie...you write these emotions with such intensity. But when looking past the emotions and looking at the poem itself...I have to tell ya ..you worked this theme and metaphor to poetic perfection. All the anologies and references of music, composers, the piano, etc... the whole theme is carried out wonderfully and one can see the work you put into this. very very well done Melissa... you and your clever muse should take a bow for this. You're the hidden cost and the thing that's lost in everything I do. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (tears fall down my cheeks) Oh Melissa, this is so sad but so beautiful too! (sad sigh) My heart goes out to yours, but I know deep down true love will come and touch your heart very soon, then the angels will be singing a duet with your heart eternally, then you will be composing the most beautiful love like you already do! (smiles) We all love you, sweet friend, you are sooooooooo romantic! (kiss on cheek) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Melissa, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
This is so softly aching, and the end so hopeful. I love it. Sanda |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
again, I bow to the Queen of Romance. . . you write these with such a deep understanding and feeling. . . -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Chelsea~ Member
since 2001-02-09
Posts 260Ontario, CANADA |
missy, you express yourself cleverly here, I really enjoyed this theme, and I do love that your optimism shines through in the end your prince will come! |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Beautifully written Melissa! The words flow so smoothly ... and such a delicate rhyming scheme, very much enjoyed! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
A painful melody that played beautifully and pulled at my heartstrings as it pulled me deeper into its embrace. Stunning. Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
The way your words remain true to the theme of the poem in every way is exhilarating, Melissa. You have written a superb poem here, my girl!  |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
And the echoes of that last haunting note will whisper in the minds and hearts of the reader for days to come.... This although painful was simply beautiful Melissa!!! Perhaps not only the Queen of Romance but the Queen of Music of the Soul as well!!!! Isis |
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athena4 Senior Member
since 2000-12-10
Posts 622 |
Melissa, This work is so full of beauty and longing, it takes my breath away. You are an incredible writer, and your words can capture all of my feelings. You need to publish a book of all your art. I just know it would be best seller.... You have a magic touch with passion and feelings, and I am always taken away with your writing... Love, Elise |
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