Open Poetry #16 |
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A Figment of My Fantasy |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding ![]() |
If life were like my fantasy You would be right here with me I’d know your skin and feel your touch And you would feel it just as much I’d know your lips and feel your kiss I’d fall into its sweet abyss With kisses soft and tender too In my dreams I’m wrapped in you You hold me through my sleeping night You’re next to me, we’re tucked up tight I wake with thoughts of you at dawn And more come as the day goes on As we talk through day and night I’m trying hard with all my might To keep a foot in light of day But fantasies, they have a way Of crowding out all other thoughts Suspending time, a moment caught Catch me…..share this dance with me Kiss me….. share this fantasy Hold my hand and lead me dear Touch my skin and pull me near Kiss me…. hold me next to you Kiss me…. do you want me too? Breathless, passion in the air Can you feel it? Take me there Hold me…. for I cannot breath Hold me…. is this make-believe? If this be dream, don’t let me know If this be real, don’t let me go I’m lost within my fantasy You want to get lost here with me? If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*grin* I know all about this kind of fantasy. I live there all the time. Keeps me sane. ![]() ![]() Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Skyfire![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-12-27
Posts 3381Riding |
Love the way you wrote this! Great job! |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
~Tracy~ this was beautiful!!! ![]() I love your work so much, y'know that? you write with such love and compassion regardless if the poem has a melancholy theme to it or not...just superb ![]() Take care Amy ![]() "I could kiss you in |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
I have to say, I love this one!! ![]() All writing comes |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Im smiling and shaking my head... remembering how it felt to be this sweetly inspired... this is a cadence kissed gem of anticpation enjoy it dear poetess... the fantasy makes for a wonderful muse... reality usually takes the words away. (forgive my moth cynicism)I think Im just plain tired. well done Tracy..love the format of the second part. jm You're the hidden cost and the thing that's lost in everything I do. |
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Midnitesun![]()
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Now Tracey, this is a delightful fantasy that merits testing in reality. Fantasy is great, it can help make you feel warm on cold lonely nights. But if you can get your hands on the real? Enough said. |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Karen, I see you understand. Nothing wrong with a little fantasy now and then is there? A man to fulfill all my fantasies? Now there’s a tall order, would have to be a helluva fella!!! ![]() Skyfyre, thank you, I’m so glad you liked this piece. Amy, thank you very much for the high praise. I’m flattered indeed to hear this from one who speaks so eloquently of love LoneWolf, so glad you enjoyed this. JM, yes, the inspiration here was sweet indeed and I am enjoying it a great deal. Thank you Kacy, I must say I couldn’t agree more. Nuff said!!! ![]() If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
very nice miss Tracey and I do hope its for real! |
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Domzi Member
since 2001-09-08
Posts 288New York (BK) |
I smiled when I read this because sometimes our fantasies are wanted as realities. Great write! Do or die! |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
I, also, say to self too good to be true I'll wake any moment from this dream of loving you. If I do, if I wake... if it was all a fantasy in dream I'll still hold you tight hold at bay reality. For tonight I kiss you softly within a nameless place tonight we sleep together in the dream of this embrace. 'You, you were standin', I was there, two worlds collided...'. Night, Trace. Sweet dreams. |
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Larry C![]()
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Tracey, See, now too many people are writing really effective passionate poetry around here!! Holy cow! I can't keep doin' this. Ya' know this one really sends me! ![]() |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
Tracey...I enjoy fantasties too. This is a very nice one I must say. Great job alan |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I enjoyed the whole of this, the rhyming, the message and the warmth you gave. *s ~Wynter "For it was not into my ear you whispered, but into my heart. |
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Greeneyes![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
very nice Tracey, I love the way you constructed this, and the feeling it left.... ![]() Greeneyes~ ***** I keep my ideals, because in spite of everything, I still believe that people are really good at heart. Anne Frank 09*12*01 [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (edited 11-11-2001).] |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
yes, so true, and it reads just like it feels....magical and inviting. Thank you for this one ![]() Kathleen |
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Ven Member
since 2001-10-01
Posts 102U.K. |
I think "beautiful" sums it up. ![]() |
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Mistletoe Angel![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
![]() (sigh) Oh my gosh, this is sooooooooo beautiful! (smiles) I love it! (sigh) I know what this feels like, for every night I lose myself in the lovely fantasies of my dream girl I long to love. (sigh) You are soooooo romantic, sweet friend! (kiss on cheek) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Tracey, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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catalinamoon![]()
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Tracey, this is wonderful. I was living in the middle of this beautiful fantasy for so long, but I have been rudely kicked out of it. Shesh. I love this, its so lyrical and happy. Sandra |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Walt, fantasy, reality…where does one end and the other begin huh??? Domzi, how true, thank you Duncan, sigh. I think I like your poem better than mine…but then…I would, wouldn’t I??? Yours gave me sweet dreams and smiles to last the day. Loved the song line too…perfect Larry, glad this one sent you (as long as it doesn’t send you away from here!!! Lol) Alan, thank you, and glad I’m not the only one!! Wynter, so glad you enjoyed it. I enjoyed writing it Greeneyes, thank you for your kind comments Kay, so glad you found it magical and inviting. This part of my world is for me too. Ven, thank you, yes, beautiful does sum up this fantasy very well Noah, ahh, so glad you enjoyed this, for you are the prince of romantic fantasy. Hope yours comes true one day Sandra, rudely kicked out huh??? Love that way of expressing it!! Yes, this piece is happy, kind of how I feel these days If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
If this be dream, don’t let me know If this be real, don’t let me go |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
If this be dream, don’t let me know If this be real, don’t let me go I can only echo the sentiment Dunc. You know ilumddd. ![]() [This message has been edited by Tracey (02-02-2002 05:11 PM).] |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Sometimes, a heart cannot live up to definition. Though, not yours...I will remember yours. ![]() |
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