Open Poetry #16 |
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Crying |
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Mon Cherie![]() ![]()
since 2001-10-31
Posts 922Land of Never-ending Summers ![]() |
It has been days The rain keeps falling In slates of heavy downpour In sprinkles of shower passing Heaven must know how I feel The persistant ache in my heart Coz the skies are crying The tears I am holding back so hard I feel so weak and tired From giving so much I know not what to do now Coz my heart has been ripped apart I just want to hide and sleep Never again coming awake Unless there should be a happy ending Else I'd rather be nailed and staked *sigh* Sorry for writing another sad pathetic one This is just how down I'm feeling lately Hopefully, one fine happy day I'd look back at the these sad pieces and smile at the memories But now, the pain is just too much [This message has been edited by Mon Cherie (edited 11-10-2001).] |
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Sunnyone Member Ascendant
since 2000-07-06
Posts 5334Staffordshire, England |
Ah, Cherie, sadness is also allowed here, as poets draw their inspiration from life, and life is not always happy. It helps to express the words that are spilling from the heart like this rain is spilling in your writing. I, for one, can identify with this one, and also know that the sun will shine for you once more......believe me...... The road goes on forever, the stories never end, and people are the same the world over! |
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rosepetals25![]()
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Mon Cherie, Don't ever apologize for expressing your feelings. For many here writing the pain is the best way to deal with hurt that haunts you. Keep writing it out... It will get better. I hope that time comes soon for you. Warm hugs, Tara |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
The rain is a very soothing element of life .. let it wash your pain away. It may seem like a monsoon, but in the end life is always restored and fresh. As you write it out before you, you will feel its release. This is an excellent example!! Keep it coming!! |
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Mistletoe Angel![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
![]() (big hugggsssssss) Oh Tara, never apologize for writing out your sad thoughts! (sigh) We are all here for you always, and in sharing your tears, we can feel your loving heart through your words and reach out and make your tears one sof gold and hope! (sigh) We all love you so very much, and I pray with all my heart that joy will again fill your words and love will shine wherever you go! (sigh) I love you, sweet Mon! (kiss on cheek) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice expression of your thoughts...hope things get better for you...soon...James |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Just keep writing...it does help and you expressed this very well. ~hugs, Nancy~ ~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before.~ |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
yes, keep writing and expressing. ![]() critique? spell check everything and spell it out....no shortcuts words like because instead of coz Kathleen |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
I know how this one feels. Hang in there, it will get better with time. All writing comes |
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RosePetal![]() ![]()
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
Hi Sweetie, Just know that you are never alone and you have many friends here who care about you! Those gray skies will soon be baby blue again for you with bright colored balloons floating and a warm inviting sun! Keep your head up! Love, RP |
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Midnitesun![]()
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
A good expression of sadness, Mon Cherie. A sunny day will come again, maybe as early as tomorrow. |
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kaile![]() ![]()
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Cherie, i will prefer it if you don't add a footnote at the end of your musing..a poem should be able to stand on its own..and this one did, without any need for further explanations... ![]() |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Your expression of sadness is...beautiful even still. I know this place...it will pass..Thank you for sharing. As we too will have these days. {hugs}. Sincerely, Regina It's all in the mind |
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Mon Cherie![]() ![]()
since 2001-10-31
Posts 922Land of Never-ending Summers |
Thanks everyone for the show of support. Though I'm still feeling ![]() ![]() Irish Rose & faterider: Thanks for the advice. I can't edit my poem now, but I'll remember when I work on the others. ![]() |
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