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Her Soul
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Her Soul |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Her soul like crystal snowflakes broken easily amid the dust shattered from the pleadings ‘You must! You must!’ She only wants to dissolve like ice wants to just to melt away but icy breath of haunting lovers entreat her yet to stay Trampling her gentle heart devouring her life’s source all the while, lovers claim ‘I love only you, of course!’ When her spirit is sapped pPicked dry and left to die Lovers will ne’er look back nNor do they hear her sigh A melting tear of crystal lLies now beside her cheek Would life have been better if she were not so meek. |
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The Lady of Shallot Senior Member
since 2001-10-03
Posts 818USA |
 very moving and very heartwrenching piece here....moved me greatly  -befriend yourself and you will never be alone- [This message has been edited by The Lady of Shallot (edited 11-08-2001).] |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* my heart was touched by this poem. I know these feelings so well. Now I keep my heart locked tightly away and only let it free to express love though my poetry. A magnificent and emotion filled poem. Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
We all want it to be "perfect" (for lack of better word ATT) - great write and I have to ask - did she enjoy what she had while she had it, meek or not? Sadly many reach the top of the ladder to find it really does have an end - and want it to end more gently - I think whether it does or not depends on us and what we're willing to accept enroute. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sad sigh) Oh, this is so so sad but beautiful, sweet friend! (sigh) My heart cries out to this person and prays for sweet love to fill her heart! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend! You have such a beautiful heart, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I guess we may never know...but you speak for all of us here, m'sister... A beautiful write from you!  ? |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you all...I'm thinking of starting a group for women who are too reticent to take that first step towards someone they care about...if the meek inherit the earth, I'd like MY inheritance NOW please!!  |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Poet deVine, Lovely, lovely words. |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Oooh, this one has a spooky sort of quality to it. I like it though. Nicely done, Sharon. All writing comes |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
 a soul that loves in sincerity can never melt, if she is meek and still true to herself she is a lion in spirit.... Kathleen |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
you'll get yours. . .perhaps sooner than you think. . . great job here. . . good to see you writing again. . . ------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Does the group have to be for women only?--lol.... very nice lady take care There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar. |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Beautifully written Sharon ... wonderful phrasing and flow throughout, with such a tender quality, much enjoyed! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
She only wants to dissolve like ice wants to just to melt away but icy breath of haunting lovers entreat her yet to stay =============================== yes..I ditto Kit...perfect phrasing and analogies...wrapped in rhyme-devine  an aching write of what far too many know.. and very cool about starting that group Sharon. Good luck on that venture.Another way to give others a voice beyond poetry. |
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A Whisper's Caress Senior Member
since 2000-11-03
Posts 791on the horizon of a fairytale |
wow, I feel a little bit like the subject of this piece. beautifully done..... this woman's soul drowned in the shallow waters of a man's heart. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
And yet, like a crystal snowflake - She is one of a kind - unique in her own special way... as is this lovely poem.. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Well, I got here late but at least I didn't miss this sad and wonderful piece Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
This is very good. And, so touching. I keep the door to my heart locked. |
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Accordionmaid Member
since 2001-10-28
Posts 153MA/USA |
Enjoyed reading this. |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
beautiful.... |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Thank you!!! You don't know what your words mean to me..having writer's block and coming out of it are scary!!! |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Oh, I know about writer's block, but listen, it's a wonderful feeling when the words begin pouring out of you again, and you know they are words that were just "birthing" so enjoy the feeling! Kathleen |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
PoetdeVine~ Really nicely done~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
You know I read your comment after my brain had its thoughts for a comment, but isn't it so true, that that saying is so "not true". The meek when it comes to relationships suffer in heart, mind and soul. Sometimes you just have to say, "dang it, and go get it!" May I give a gentle push? This was so familiar and soooo good! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Yes I think so...many are meek but when you see what you like you have to go after it with determination...James |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
This is lovely Sharon, but sad too. So good to read you again Maree. |
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Charisma
since 2000-09-30
Posts 5906lost in blue pages |
Beautiful heartwrenched piece. Charisma |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Awesome write. And may the meek speak out for what they seek. And as a sweet friend once wrote, all that you are seeking is also seeking you. (Thanks Jaime Fradera, hope I quoted you correctly) |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
This piece is so sad...yet beautifully done! So pleased I didn't miss this one. ~Hugs, Nancy~ ~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before.~ |
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peaches73533 Senior Member
since 2001-11-04
Posts 981OK, USA |
Wonderful job.I can relate t this in some ways as I'm very careful to give any of my heart away at all.Your words touched my heart. Peaches |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
I have to say that I'm with Nan on this one. Meek or not, she's still unique and lovely.  God bless America, my home sweet home. |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
Great Job Sharon... beautiful poem. I have buried my heart and burned the map.... |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Alone again, naturally....but is that really natural...scares me at the moment. Always you write with such intensity. ~Wynter "For it was not into my ear you whispered, but into my heart. |
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