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Poet deVine

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Hurricane Alley

0 posted 2001-11-08 08:12 PM

Her soul like crystal snowflakes
broken easily amid the dust
shattered from the pleadings
‘You must! You must!’

She only wants to dissolve like ice
wants to just to melt away
but icy breath of haunting lovers
entreat her yet to stay

Trampling her gentle heart
devouring her life’s source
all the while, lovers claim
‘I love only you, of course!’

When her spirit is sapped
pPicked dry and left to die
Lovers will ne’er look back
nNor do they hear her sigh

A melting tear of crystal
lLies now beside her cheek
Would life have been better
if she were not so meek.

The Lady of Shallot
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since 2001-10-03

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1 posted 2001-11-08 08:14 PM

very moving and very heartwrenching piece here....moved me greatly

-befriend yourself and you will never be alone-

[This message has been edited by The Lady of Shallot (edited 11-08-2001).]

Startime
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2 posted 2001-11-08 08:15 PM

*sigh* my heart was touched by this poem. I know these feelings so well. Now I keep my heart locked tightly away and only let it free to express love though my poetry. A magnificent and emotion filled poem.

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

jwesley
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Spring, Texas

3 posted 2001-11-08 08:17 PM

We all want it to be "perfect" (for lack of better word ATT) - great write and I have to ask - did she enjoy what she had while she had it, meek or not? Sadly many reach the top of the ladder to find it really does have an end - and want it to end more gently - I think whether it does or not depends on us and what we're willing to accept enroute.

Mistletoe Angel

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Portland, Oregon

4 posted 2001-11-08 08:17 PM

(sad sigh) Oh, this is so so sad but beautiful, sweet friend! (sigh) My heart cries out to this person and prays for sweet love to fill her heart! (sigh) God Bless You, sweet friend! You have such a beautiful heart, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

serenity blaze
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5 posted 2001-11-08 08:18 PM

I guess we may never know...but you speak for all of us here, m'sister...

A beautiful write from you!

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Poet deVine

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Hurricane Alley

6 posted 2001-11-08 08:30 PM

Thank you all...I'm thinking of starting a group for women who are too reticent to take that first step towards someone they care about...if the meek inherit the earth, I'd like MY inheritance NOW please!!

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

7 posted 2001-11-08 08:43 PM

Poet deVine,
Lovely, lovely words.

Lone Wolf
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8 posted 2001-11-08 09:39 PM

Oooh, this one has a spooky sort of quality to it. I like it though. Nicely done, Sharon.

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

Irish Rose
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9 posted 2001-11-08 09:59 PM

a soul that loves in sincerity can never melt, if she is meek and still true to herself she is a lion in spirit....

Kathleen
nickname "Kay"

"Others can stop you temporarily, but only you can do it permanently."

Sven

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East Lansing, MI USA

10 posted 2001-11-08 10:01 PM

you'll get yours. . .perhaps sooner than you think. . .

great job here. . . good to see you writing again. . .

-------------------------------------------------------

To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Jamie
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Blue Heaven

11 posted 2001-11-08 11:59 PM

Does the group have to be for women only?--lol....

very nice lady

take care

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

Kit McCallum

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12 posted 2001-11-09 07:24 AM

Beautifully written Sharon ... wonderful phrasing and flow throughout, with such a tender quality, much enjoyed!

Best wishes,
/Kit

Janet Marie
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13 posted 2001-11-09 08:17 AM

She only wants to dissolve like ice
wants to just to melt away
but icy breath of haunting lovers
entreat her yet to stay
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yes..I ditto Kit...perfect phrasing and analogies...wrapped in rhyme-devine

an aching write of what far too many know..
and very cool about starting that group Sharon.

Good luck on that venture.
Another way to give others a voice beyond poetry.

A Whisper's Caress
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on the horizon of a fairytale

14 posted 2001-11-09 08:21 AM

wow, I feel a little bit like the subject of this piece. beautifully done.....

this woman's soul drowned in the shallow waters of a man's heart.

Nan

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15 posted 2001-11-09 09:29 AM

And yet, like a crystal snowflake - She is one of a kind - unique in her own special way... as is this lovely poem..

Interloper

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Deep in the heart

16 posted 2001-11-09 09:33 AM

Well, I got here late but at least I didn't miss this sad and wonderful piece

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

SmartChick
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On A Journey To The Unknown

17 posted 2001-11-09 10:24 AM

This is very good. And, so touching. I keep the door to my heart locked.

Accordionmaid
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18 posted 2001-11-09 10:28 AM

Enjoyed reading this.

Zinsser
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19 posted 2001-11-09 11:17 AM

beautiful....

Poet deVine

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Hurricane Alley

20 posted 2001-11-09 11:19 AM

Thank you!!! You don't know what your words mean to me..having writer's block and coming out of it are scary!!!

Irish Rose
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21 posted 2001-11-09 11:20 AM

Oh, I know about writer's block, but listen, it's a wonderful feeling when the words begin pouring out of you again, and you know they are words that were just "birthing"
so enjoy the feeling!

Kathleen
nickname "Kay"
also wrote as The Lady of Shallot
"be true to yourself"

Marge Tindal

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Florida's Foreverly Shores

22 posted 2001-11-09 11:30 AM

PoetdeVine~
Really nicely done~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Mysteria

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23 posted 2001-11-09 03:29 PM

You know I read your comment after my brain had its thoughts for a comment, but isn't it so true, that that saying is so "not true". The meek when it comes to relationships suffer in heart, mind and soul. Sometimes you just have to say, "dang it, and go get it!" May I give a gentle push? This was so familiar and soooo good!

JamesMichael
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Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

24 posted 2001-11-09 04:01 PM

Yes I think so...many are meek but when you see what you like you have to go after it with determination...James

Dark Angel
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25 posted 2001-11-09 04:07 PM

This is lovely Sharon, but sad too. So good to read you again

Maree.

Charisma

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lost in blue pages

26 posted 2001-11-09 04:19 PM

Beautiful heartwrenched piece.

Charisma

Midnitesun

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Gaia

27 posted 2001-11-09 04:26 PM

Awesome write. And may the meek speak out for what they seek.
And as a sweet friend once wrote, all that you are seeking is also seeking you. (Thanks Jaime Fradera, hope I quoted you correctly)

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

28 posted 2001-11-09 04:26 PM

This piece is so sad...yet beautifully done!
So pleased I didn't miss this one.
~Hugs, Nancy~

~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before.~

peaches73533
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29 posted 2001-11-09 04:57 PM

Wonderful job.I can relate t this in some ways as I'm very careful to give any of my heart away at all.Your words touched my heart.
Peaches

Elizabeth

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30 posted 2001-11-10 12:01 PM

I have to say that I'm with Nan on this one. Meek or not, she's still unique and lovely.

God bless America, my home sweet home.

Alan
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right next door

31 posted 2001-11-11 07:38 AM

Great Job Sharon... beautiful poem. I have buried my heart and burned the map....

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines

32 posted 2001-11-11 07:43 AM

Alone again, naturally....but is that really natural...scares me at the moment. Always you write with such intensity.

~Wynter

"For it was not into my ear you whispered, but into my heart.
It was not my lips you kissed, but my soul."
(J.Garland)

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