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Alicethruglass
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0 posted 2001-11-08 05:42 PM


Aliceprismed

She surrounds me, this Alice.
Wherever I go, she is always
looking over my shoulder,
giving me raised eyebrows,
blaming me with heard words,
faulting me in her evasive way,
(not there when I turn to catch her,
sneering at me.)

She is prismed in my soul,
every thought encased within,
holding me to her, in ghostlike trance,
swaying me into neverland.
She has bound me in her debt,
confined in the fog of early morn,
when thoughts rescued by dreamers
have not yet discharged into the light of day.

Time steals her crystal facade,
a veneer, window-dressed only for me.
Beneath the surface, she chips away
until one day She will become I
and I shall become prismed, as Alice steps through
and I am pulled back, becoming
AliceBehindGlass.

~A~

[This message has been edited by Alicethruglass (edited 11-08-2001).]

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Marge Tindal
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1 posted 2001-11-08 05:45 PM


AliceThruGlass~
There are so many facets of you reflected in your poetry~
I've learned that I love each of them for different reasons~
You are writing some mighty fine poetry, my friend~
This is stunning~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

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2 posted 2001-11-08 06:33 PM


A small glimpse at a multi-faceted jewel..that's the image I'm getting from this tiny self-portrait, Alice. It's very well written.

"Time steals her crystal facade,
a veneer, window-dressed only for me."


[This message has been edited by Midnitesun (edited 11-08-2001).]

doreen peri
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3 posted 2001-11-08 07:04 PM


you write with finesse, full of metaphor and imagery...... a treasure, this piece, exploring the human spirit outside looking in, inside looking out

you have a lot of talent

thank you for sharing this.  

Duncan
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4 posted 2001-11-08 07:29 PM


She has bound me in her debt,
confined in the fog of early morn,
when thoughts rescued by dreamers
have not yet discharged into the light of day

This is such a piece for pondering...may take a pleasant while.  Nice to read you, again.

Magnus
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5 posted 2001-11-08 07:50 PM


Nicely done....I love all of the various
expressions you use in writing this poem.

The Lady of Shallot
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6 posted 2001-11-08 07:57 PM


this is so indepth, yes, the looking glass where everything is not always reflected. I think this is one of the most special poems I've read in awhile.

-befriend yourself and you will never be alone-

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7 posted 2001-11-09 10:11 AM


I came back to say, knock her out and be yourself!!!  that's more than enough    

Kathleen
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"Others can stop you temporarily, but only you can do it permanently."

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8 posted 2001-11-09 11:06 AM



[tongue in cheek] - that's not Alice, that's your mother....

now, in all seriousness, I enjoyed this very much!  Well done...

Alicethruglass
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9 posted 2001-11-10 06:01 AM


~*Marge*~..I am not so sure about stunning,
well maybe I was stunned into writing these
feelings..truly I am waiting for the day
that my world seems right and I no longer
have to express in poetry but can live it
all instead. I thank you for your very nice
and uplifting comments today.                

Midnitesun...your reading and response is
one readson I enjoy posting here. Thank you.
Some days I think I should not look into that mirror.

doreen...when you compliment me this way, I feel arriving at some higher level, finally. Thank you for reading me inside out and outside in.
  
Duncan... every morning, early I rise. I look into
that mirror seeing my soul or that of Alice's.
Dreams are still fresh, beginning to fog though as
reality sets in as the sun begins it's rise to a
new day. Not sure if that explains it any
better..and I am always held in Alices debt as she
stands there watching my every move.


Magnus ...Nice to see you. Thank you for reading
and enjoying my expressions.

The Lady of Shallot..I always enjoy you
enjoying my words. I hope your days are
continuing to improve.


Irish Rose..hey if I knock her out,
I go down for the count too..then what?
Take care

Lady In White...I wish it were my mother..*s...
I have come to realize, she is a much stronger
person than I. Thank you

~A~
  

[This message has been edited by Alicethruglass (edited 11-10-2001).]

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