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If I Close My Eyes
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If I Close My Eyes |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT 
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IF I CLOSE MY EYES If I close my eyes I feel you soft to my hardness gentle to my roughness You are close yet you are so far away I question your touch Are you real? You feel real in my closed eyes almost unbelievable you are my dream As you inhale I feel taken As you exhale I feel accepted You breath our pleasure we become one ... if I close my eyes |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
This is beautiful. I like the contrast between hard and soft, inhale and exhale. And what if those closed eyes should open??? |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
This is beautiful and dreamy. I can really relate to this one. Lovely poem CT If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
ctowen, Oh I love this  I'm so glad I stopped in this morning. I echo these thoughts everytime I talk to my love.Hugs, Tara |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
Kay - The contrast almost seems fragile, and as for the eyes ... I'm not sure. I haven't yet met the one that could. Thank you. Tracey - It's kind of like your smile, "beautiful and dreamy"!!! A real eye opener!! Thank you for your comments. Tara - Glad you stopped by too, it does have a bit of an echo to it, doesn't it! Watchout for those Texan's!! |
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rosepetals25
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Bump cause I love this  |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
As you inhale I feel taken As you exhale I feel accepted You breath our pleasure darn..wish I had written this *s loved it ~Wynter "For it was not into my ear you whispered, but into my heart. |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* oh yes, I love the contrast too. A perfect match. Very well done, Craig. I love it.  Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Not too shabby....in fact...simply superbly done...Nice write... |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
If I close my eyes --- the world comes alive and beautiful doesn't it my friend. Very well done. jwesley |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
Tara - Glad to see you back!Bump anytime!! Wynter - Thank you for taking a moment to read and comment. You have written such ... I have felt these words tumbling around inside of you with your work. And also in your smile!! Karen - "Thank heaven for little stars!!" Magnus - I am truly honored, thank you!! jwesley - Indeed my friend, absolutely indeed !!! ( watchout for us dreamers!! ) |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
if I close my eyes" Greeneyes~ ***** I keep my ideals, because in spite of everything, I still believe that people are really good at heart. Anne Frank 09*12*01 [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (edited 11-11-2001).] |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
What beautiful things are here behind closed eyes. I hope they all come out into full view. Sandra |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
Greeneyes - So much said in so few words. Thank you, I will keep an eye on you. Sandra - If you were to look deep into thy eyes, you would see the reflection of something deeply rare, ...  |
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