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ctowen
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0 posted 2001-11-08 12:35 PM


IF I CLOSE MY EYES

If I close my eyes
I feel you
soft to my hardness
gentle to my roughness
You are close yet
you are so far away
I question your touch
Are you real?
You feel real
in my closed eyes
almost unbelievable
you are my dream
As you inhale
I feel taken
As you exhale
I feel accepted
You breath
our pleasure
we become one ...
if I close my eyes

© Copyright 2001 C. Thomas Owen - All Rights Reserved
Midnitesun
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1 posted 2001-11-08 12:42 PM


This is beautiful. I like the contrast between hard and soft, inhale and exhale. And what if those closed eyes should open???
Tracey
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2 posted 2001-11-08 01:12 AM


This is beautiful and dreamy. I can really relate to this one. Lovely poem CT

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

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3 posted 2001-11-08 07:52 AM


ctowen,

   Oh I love this   I'm so glad I stopped in this morning.  I echo these thoughts everytime I talk to my love.

Hugs,
Tara

ctowen
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4 posted 2001-11-08 08:30 AM


Kay - The contrast almost seems fragile,
      and as for the eyes ... I'm not sure.
      I haven't yet met the one that could.
      Thank you.

Tracey - It's kind of like your smile,
         "beautiful and dreamy"!!!
         A real eye opener!!
         Thank you for your comments.

Tara - Glad you stopped by too, it does
       have a bit of an echo to it,
       doesn't it!
       Watchout for those Texan's!!

rosepetals25
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5 posted 2001-11-08 07:06 PM


Bump cause I love this  
nakdthoughts
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6 posted 2001-11-08 07:23 PM


As you inhale
I feel taken
As you exhale
I feel accepted
You breath
our pleasure


darn..wish I had written this  *s  loved it

~Wynter

"For it was not into my ear you whispered, but into my heart.
It was not my lips you kissed, but my soul."
(J.Garland)

Startime
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7 posted 2001-11-08 07:42 PM


*sigh* oh yes, I love the contrast too. A perfect match. Very well done, Craig. I love it.  

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Magnus
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8 posted 2001-11-08 07:43 PM


Not too shabby....in fact...simply superbly
done...Nice write...

jwesley
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9 posted 2001-11-08 08:00 PM


If I close my eyes --- the world comes alive and beautiful doesn't it my friend.

Very well done.

jwesley

ctowen
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10 posted 2001-11-09 12:35 PM


Tara    - Glad to see you back!Bump anytime!!

Wynter  - Thank you for taking a moment      
          to read and comment.
          You have written such ...
          I have felt these words tumbling
          around inside of you with your
          work. And also in your smile!!

Karen   - "Thank heaven for little stars!!"

Magnus  - I am truly honored, thank you!!

jwesley - Indeed my friend, absolutely
          indeed !!!
          ( watchout for us dreamers!! )

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11 posted 2001-11-11 12:04 PM


if I close my eyes"


Greeneyes~


*****


I keep my ideals,
because in spite of everything,
I still believe that
people are really good at heart.
Anne Frank
09*12*01

[This message has been edited by Greeneyes (edited 11-11-2001).]

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12 posted 2001-11-11 11:06 AM


What beautiful things are here behind closed eyes. I hope they all come out into full view.
Sandra

ctowen
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13 posted 2001-11-12 12:53 PM


Greeneyes  -  So much said in so few words.
              Thank you, I will keep an eye
              on you.

Sandra     -  If you were to look deep into
              thy eyes, you would see the
              reflection of something deeply
              rare, ...  

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