Open Poetry #16 |
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When She Comes Around |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart ![]() |
My Muse is on haitus...I hope you enjoy the rewrite... When She Comes Around you will know her, for she will stroke your heart soft, unspoken ways, 'tis her way of art then know you instant rare, singly sublime she will persist gently for all of time finger's gentle grasp, deliquesce begins then with shiver lightly, warmth welcoming from stroke of hand, a whisper of her sigh to lay but nigh her, through the bye and bye gentle spirit, blessing's virtuous light enters inner worlds, making all things right comes without question, comes to you with love challenge thee God's will, spoken from above? speak you now, and softly so "stay with me, and never go..." original 4 November 00 revised 6 November 01 |
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Mistletoe Angel![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
![]() (sigh) So soft and beautiful this touching poem is! (smiles) Your muses are always so beautiful and exciting to read; I love it! (kiss on cheek) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karilea, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
speak you now, and softly so "stay with me, and never go..." and so shall this treasure of a poem of your's that I read rite now... This is one more added2my favorites of your's... Hugs2uDearPoetFriend *~coco~* |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
finger's gentle grasp, deliquesce begins then with shiver lightly, warmth welcoming from stroke of hand, a whisper of her sigh to lay but nigh her, through the bye and bye ================================ Muses go on Hiatus???? who knew ![]() ![]() I have another word for it but I'll act like a lady for a change (rofl) ![]() as for this lovely missive from your pen... its pure poetry...feather light and delicate... I love the vocabulary as well as the cadence and softly placed internal rhyme beautiful poetess sun ![]() ![]() |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
A sure read to warm up a smile Very nice Karilea ![]() |
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peaches73533 Senior Member
since 2001-11-04
Posts 981OK, USA |
Very well put.your words are beautiful as always. Peaches |
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Sven![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
always my friend. . . hope that the Muse comes back soon. . . ![]() ---------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
Beautiful, dear Sunshine... ~Tier |
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Mysteria![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Now you know today of all days, this one LOVES me! ![]() ~*~ Carpe' Diem ~*~ |
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Magnus![]() ![]()
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Beautifully done Sunshine...very much so. |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very beautiful, Karilea. Soft and lovely! |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Oh my ... this is so tender and softly flowing Karilea. What a beautiful and delicate read, just lovely! ![]() Best wishes, /Kit |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
This is a beautiful poem. Enjoyed reading it. |
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Interloper![]() ![]()
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Beautifully thought and written ![]() Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sunshine-- "you will know her, for she will stroke your heart soft, unspoken ways, 'tis her way of art then know you instant rare, singly sublime she will persist gently for all of time" I know her...She warms my heart so many times with the way she looks at life...right now I see her in this wonderful rewrite...she won't be gone long. |
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