Open Poetry #16 |
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Winter Of the Heart |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
I had opened my heart For the last time I had opened my life For the last time I had reached out When someone needed a hand Not letting them touch my heart Not even close at hand But seems now all was for naught For the only thing I have now Are the memories of loneliness? That you helped me to disavow You tried to make me smile Just by sending me love notes I tried to tell you that you are wasting time Seems there is a hole in the boat So now I dry my eyes of your tears Closing my heart up one last time You will have to live with my being near Just as I want you in this world of mine I am now making a vow That I shall not reach out For my heart I shall not allow To belong to anyone but you [This message has been edited by Alan (edited 11-06-2001).] |
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Midnitesun![]()
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
It sounded pretty sad until I read that ending. While you were reaching out, someone reached your within? ![]() ![]() |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
thanks for reading Midnitesun..that can happen at times |
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MyEnchanted_Melody Senior Member
since 2001-05-30
Posts 1106across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be. |
A sad lonely touching read....but with a wonderful ending that ends the loneliness... Take care... Thank you ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
What a lovely twist at the closing Alan ... I too, was reading this from a sorrowful angle, and yet, was surprised and touched by the beautiful promise in the ending. Very nicely done, much enjoyed! ![]() Best wishes, /Kit |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent writing here Alan. Love the ending! ~hugs, Nancy~ ~I've loved you forever, in lifetimes before.~ |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
MyEnchanted_Melody...thank you for enjoying this. Kit McCallum..thank you for your kind words..i enjoy taking the reader in one direction then making a sharp turn... Enchantress..good to see you again..thanks for reading this |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
stepping in the right direction with true love connection lovely sweet happy ending Hope |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Alan, Nice write, enjoyed the read. |
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rosepetals25![]()
since 2000-05-31
Posts 3076PA |
Alan, You had me fooled! *chuckles* I was ready to tell to not close your heart to love and so on. But the ending was a wonderful twist ![]() Hugs, Tara |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Very well done. You brought tears and then a smile of happiness. A great read and a wonderful write, Alan. ![]() Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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SEA![]() ![]()
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I love the ending, I really enjoyed the emotions you let me feel. ![]() ![]() |
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A Whisper's Caress Senior Member
since 2000-11-03
Posts 791on the horizon of a fairytale |
Gosh! This is beautiful.... Look into the eyes of a man and |
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Midnitesun![]()
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
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Sven![]() ![]()
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
the winter of the heart is cold. . . but yet, a warmth still pervades. . . well done Alan, you explore the feelings well here. . . -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
This is lovely Alan. Like everyone else, I thought it sounded so sad, until the end. The ending was so uplifting, and I love happy endings. If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Nightshade![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Lovely heartfelt read Alan. Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Alan Senior Member
since 2000-09-12
Posts 1499right next door |
I want to thank everyone for reading and replying. This little gem was written in a tear jerking style before I rewrote it. |
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Mistletoe Angel![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
![]() (smiles) Such a beautiful promise of love fills your heart! (big hugggsssss) You are such a loving friend and will make a woman happy forever! (smiles) May she always bring you spring and make your winters comfortable and secure! God Bless You, dearest friend! You have such a beautiful heart, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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