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VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

0 posted 2001-11-04 01:03 PM

a
tree
of life
and death
stands across
the way~
its eastern
section~
covered in
autumn leaves~
its western
barren,
stark,
fruitless.

it’s
been
that way
for years,
as if trying
to decide
whether
to live or die

one friend
says it
should be
taken out,
a new one
planted.
I wonder
could it not
be merely pruned,
fed, caressed,
with tender,
loving care
or should
it be
destroyed
merely for low
production?

how does life
and death exist
upon a sole
entity?
should we
find a lesson
in this tree’s
tandem existence?

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

Mistletoe Angel

Member Empyrean

since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

1 posted 2001-11-04 01:08 PM

(sad sigh) We should all learn this lesson indeed, for I believe all of nature has their own life, blessing, and fruit to bear. (sigh) Very powerful thoughts, dearest Virginia! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Duncan
Member Ascendant

since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

2 posted 2001-11-04 01:48 PM

it’s
been
that way
for years,
as if trying
to decide
whether
to live or die

This is such a visual piece. Title...maybe, 'It's not easy being green'. lol Really enjoyed, VAS. Much thought in this.

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

3 posted 2001-11-04 01:54 PM

Very good imagery. Caretaker Positions Available? Lost Limbs? Broken Branches? Uprooted Roots? lots of possible titles. But whatever you call it, it leaves much room for thought, a well planted seedling to nurture. Thank you for this.

Titia Geertman
Member Ascendant

since 2001-05-07

Posts 5182
Netherlands

4 posted 2001-11-04 04:32 PM

Hi VAS, long time no seen.

Nice poem, I would go for the:

be merely pruned,
fed, caressed,
with tender,
loving care

for as long there's a green leave, it's still alive.

As for a title:

"Your Choice"

Titia

A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess...
Feel free to use the pictures on my website. http://communities.msn.com/Titiasplace/

mirror man
Senior Member

since 2001-01-08

Posts 814

5 posted 2001-11-04 05:22 PM

Very thoughtful. And good.

Lone Wolf
Member Ascendant

since 2000-03-16

Posts 5842
Lansing, MI USA

6 posted 2001-11-04 05:29 PM

I think every person and every other living thing deserves a chance to blossom. Nicely written, Virginia.

All writing comes
by the grace of God.
-Ralph Waldo Emerson

VAS
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-16

Posts 7450
Oregon

7 posted 2001-11-04 05:30 PM

thank you all!!!
I like the idea of making the title have to do something with making a choice...not sure what I'll settle on there.

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

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