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The Edge
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The Edge |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Rewrite: The Edge I lay and listen to rain Plop by plop. Clicking like a link of chain Drop by drop. Weeping on the window pane Run by run. Making egress look insane One by one. Mild to wild the living stream Mad to mad. Rushing to a living mean Add by add. One by one. Drop by drop Run by run Till there are none. The reign of rain still reigns today And sands of time still pour our day. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
grain by grain... reign of rain... Love it, Sy..  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
in your reign of far heavier mist you hear the last leaves lightly kissed my gray is surround sound of quiet fog I'm still as wet when walking the dog see which way you inspire? You're the man! |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
What an interesting vision you give me. I always like the drops of rain to play like music drop by drop. Very well done.  Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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peaches73533 Senior Member
since 2001-11-04
Posts 981OK, USA |
Good words.I could envision this as I was reading your words. Peaches |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssss) Oh my gosh, what a beautiful orchestra indeed! (smiles) I love listening to the rain pattering the rooftop and the leaves always, it's such a refreshing sound! (smiles) Beautiful, sweet friend! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Seymour, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
The reign of rain still reigns today And sands of time still pour our day. ===================================== Such wise rhymes me sweet Sy... I'm watching the weather for Florida... do you and Randy have your raincoats and umbrellas ready? Looks like its gonna pour on your reign... Maybe its time to fly to Shangri-La ... Or will the eye ... pass you by? Be safe me sweet. *ww*  me |
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Lone Wolf Member Ascendant
since 2000-03-16
Posts 5842Lansing, MI USA |
Wonderful word play, Sy. Much enjoyed this one. All writing comes |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
I enjoyed the continuous motion of rain on the edge. Good description and expression. |
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mirror man Senior Member
since 2001-01-08
Posts 814 |
This appeals to me. Very good. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Nan, Thanks for the love it. *L* Sunshine, And you are my sunshine. *L* Startime, Thank you for the well done. *L* Peaches, Thank you for the nice comment. Noah, Well it wasn't the forty day kind. LOL JM, Not to worry, I won't melt or wash away. Winkiewinkie, Stinky Lone Wolf, Thank you and glad you enjoyed. Blues, Nice comment, thank you. Mirror Man, Glad you liked. |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Awww Sy...I wish you sun...to dry up the rain..just momentarily...I love the rain. Hoping you keep your balance....always. Sincerely, Regina It's all in the mind |
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