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WRBreezin
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since 2001-08-04

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0 posted 2001-11-03 07:34 AM

Bristles

Sweep clean the night's last sin
beneath the bristles swishing task
the grime of "never-life" fades away
Mercy rings aloud
towering above the drone of shallow love
Brass bells with a silver lining
chime sweet the break of day
A heart in vine knows the gentle squeezing
of sunlight's call to reach the lattice crown

Willie
©2001

Poet deVine

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Hurricane Alley

1 posted 2001-11-03 09:14 AM

Can't say that I have this problem...but I enjoyed the read. (Why are you called 'the Thug' - I checked out your website)

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

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Tamarac Fla

2 posted 2001-11-03 09:22 AM

WRBreezin,
Nice write enjoyed the read.

WRBreezin
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since 2001-08-04

Posts 212

3 posted 2001-11-03 09:57 AM

Poet deVine, Seymour

Thanks for taking a look at my "sweep" from dark to light.

Willie B

rwood
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since 2000-02-29

Posts 3793
Tennessee

4 posted 2001-11-03 10:17 PM

This reminds me so of Romeo fleeing Juliet's side at dawn to escape discovery of their affair. You are very talented and I am enjoying your verse extremely. Please keep them coming.

Sincerely,
Regina

Startime
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since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

5 posted 2001-11-03 10:20 PM

The poetic language you use is pleasing to the ear and takes one back to a time when words were filled with powerful emotion. BRAVO!!!A wonderful read.

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

WRBreezin
Member

since 2001-08-04

Posts 212

6 posted 2001-11-04 05:43 AM

Regina, Karen

Thank you for the generous remarks, I'm glad you enjoyed your look at "Bristles"

Willie B

A Whisper's Caress
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since 2000-11-03

Posts 791
on the horizon of a fairytale

7 posted 2001-11-04 09:48 AM

if I may say....

beautiful.

Look into the eyes of a man and
you will find the soul of the woman
who loves him...

peaches73533
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since 2001-11-04

Posts 981
OK, USA

8 posted 2001-11-04 10:04 AM

I enjoyed reading this very much.You're a good writer.
Peaches

vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

9 posted 2001-11-09 12:31 PM

WRBreezin-
   Very cool write...I much enjoyed the
   wording and the over-all feel of this.
   Nicely done.
   Hugs,
   ~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

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Gaia

10 posted 2001-11-09 12:40 PM

This is just bristling with good lines, Willie. And who calls you a thug? Sorry, guess I haven't linked yet.

wayoutwalt
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TEXAS (it's all big)

11 posted 2001-11-09 12:56 PM

o yuh groovy yuh

WRBreezin
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since 2001-08-04

Posts 212

12 posted 2001-11-09 05:02 AM

Thanks Everyone! I'm pleased to know you each found something to enjoy in "Bristles"

Willie B

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