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The One I Never Made
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The One I Never Made |
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1slick_lady Member Ascendant
since 2000-12-22
Posts 6088standing on a shadow's lace 
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The One I Never Made you’re the best surprise I ever had never have known anyone like you you look at the old making it seem brand new didn’t even dream of this you look straight through my disguise I see things I’ve never seen before in the reflection of your eyes reading the brail bumps of my heart somehow you are blinded to my flaws when I become afraid I’ve lost my way I then hear my accomplishments in your applause around you, my walls melt away when you reach for me it goes so deep touching places long forgotten making me loose my breath and my heart leap know all the stars in the black velvet sky by name and on them unanswered wishes did fade now the best wish of all was the one I never made "I have already paid for my future sins." Sade...(King of Sorrow) |
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Rick Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 2903Victoria, Australia |
To be loved sincerely and truly must be surely wonderful To feel a strength and warmth that asks for little but some time To know that all is fine on a day that brings rain Makes feelings entwine and the love of two rhyme Dear Lady, I enjoyed the read very much indeed and look forward to more. Sincerely Rick |
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Mon Cherie
since 2001-10-31
Posts 922Land of Never-ending Summers |
I guess this is what happens with 2 people in love. Accepting each other, encouragement and love showing in every action. So sweet, and wonderful writing! ^.^ |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
I like this. Warm and hopeful. And I especially like this 'vision' verse: "didn't even dream of this you look straight through my disguise I see things I've never seen before in the reflection of your eyes" And as usual, ending with a twist. Not to mention that you have stimulated my muse as well, and it needed it . . . Thanks, Lady. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
"some of God's greatest gifts. . . are unanswered prayers. . . " just going through my mind as I read this helen. . . you tell it well. . . wonderful my friend. . . -------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sigh) Soooooooo beautiful! Acceptance is the beauty of love, and the key to eternity! (smiles) Beautiful, sweet friend! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Helen, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
damn...I know this feeling so well....I will have to dig through the archives to show you how in sync we are...happy, happy for you Helen...dance while the band is playing, love! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
know all the stars in the black velvet sky by name and on them unanswered wishes did fade now the best wish of all was the one I never made ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ Helen, This is one terrific write! Took my breath away, and it is a keeper! ~hugs, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
This is wonderful! The best things in life are free, and sometimes you don't have to wish on a star, your dreams come true anyway. (I'm hearing a great melody in this poem) Thanks for sharing this beautiful poem. |
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The Lady of Shallot Senior Member
since 2001-10-03
Posts 818USA |
it's wonderful when someone sees all the good and the bad in us and loves us anyway! I enjoyed this Helen. It's like being reflected in their eyes but made better... -befriend yourself and you will never be alone- |
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