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Martie

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since 1999-09-21

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California

0 posted 2001-11-02 09:24 PM

To Rub out Time

We are mired in the mud,
this road has gotten so rough
and winding these tires slip.
Oh, such a vehicle,
so smiley and wide,
a comfort that seemed
would last forever
across the wind swept road.

Is this wrinkle a show
that would display all the minutes
where dreams were born?
for struggles twisted the shining
and rust seemed so small at first,
take care of rust
rub it out rub it out
sings the morning quietly,
such a small thing can grow
you know.

Could we but matriculate into our years
then graduate with lively lust intact
and a house with a picket fence
almost paid for
and travel to places
where destiny surely waits
and will always wait.

But truly
would it matter if you had your cup of tea
and a beer at sunset,
the other side of youth just is
all of a sudden,
like a coin flipped and riding circles
it falls
and settles
and you can’t turn it over,
not with a sigh or a promise.

So lets feed this precious minute
pieces of our flesh
and look at the sky where stars wink,
conspirators in some grand design,
capture its essence,
pull out all the worth of it
and fill it up to tomorrow,
for there is no polish that will
rub out time.
_______
a repost from somewhere in time

jwesley
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since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

1 posted 2001-11-02 09:41 PM

My dear Martie - Such wonderful, truthful, insiteful words, from a master of course -
read this again, and will yet again...

jwesley

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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

2 posted 2001-11-02 09:41 PM

Oh Martie! There were so many words...phrases and combinations that rang the 'truth bell' in my head as I read this, that I am not even going to point them out. This is wonderful...just as you are!
Thank you for this one!
~hugs, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So that you won't ever forget me.~

Startime
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since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

3 posted 2001-11-02 09:42 PM

Oh yes, let's capture every minute and hold it precious as the memories we savour feed us in our twilight years. I love this poem. It feels so good.

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

doreen peri
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since 1999-05-25

Posts 3812
Virginia

4 posted 2001-11-02 09:53 PM

there is no way to rub out time,
no big eraser wipes our rhyme....
we write the memories, the lines,
since time will stand in tact, sun shines
upon the past which we can pen....
then written, it will live again.....

thank you for this, martie... you are a fine writer and this piece is exceptional

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

5 posted 2001-11-03 07:05 AM

This perfect picture was out there floating, until a memory flew like a kite to grab it, bring it down, for a lesson's sake...

yes, perfect!

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

6 posted 2001-11-03 11:21 AM

the other side of youth just is
all of a sudden,
like a coin flipped and riding circles
it falls
and settles
and you can’t turn it over,
not with a sigh or a promise.

So lets feed this precious minute
pieces of our flesh
and look at the sky where stars wink,
conspirators in some grand design,
capture its essence,
pull out all the worth of it
and fill it up to tomorrow,
for there is no polish that will
rub out time.
======================================

You are so amazing .. the way your mind processes these thoughts and turns them into poetry.
gawwd I love your muse

me

I can be your hero baby ... I will kiss away the pain
I will stand by you forever ... you still take my breath away ...

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

7 posted 2001-11-03 12:01 PM

SisterOfMyHeart~

'for struggles twisted the shining
and rust seemed so small at first,
take care of rust
rub it out rub it out
sings the morning quietly,
such a small thing can grow
you know.'

What a ponderous thought for my weekend~
Thank you ... you just are the best~
I love you~
Great BIG HUGS~
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
[email protected]

Denise

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8 posted 2001-11-03 03:13 PM

Excellent expression, Martie! Very well done!

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

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Gaia

9 posted 2001-11-03 03:18 PM

My favorite carpe diem poem of the day.
Yes, enjoy the stars, the sun, the friends and the beauty that still surrounds you.

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

10 posted 2001-11-03 03:26 PM

So many good lines in this!!

'The other side of youth just is all of a sudden'

Yes, it happens so quickly doesn't it?

I enjoyed reading this very much.

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

11 posted 2001-11-03 04:58 PM

the other side of youth just is
all of a sudden,
like a coin flipped and riding circles
it falls
and settles
and you can’t turn it over,
not with a sigh or a promise.

No we can't turn it over can we?

I am sitting here Martie shaking my head, I wish I could capture the moments, the thoughts and the feelings that you do.

Absolutely a stunning and touching piece, m'dear friend.

into my library it goes.

Maree

Logan
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since 2001-05-28

Posts 1641
Arkansas

12 posted 2001-11-03 05:50 PM

Ahhh, Martie, gentle one, all so true, so true and no polish will rub out time, but it can keep the tarnish away also...very gentle smile

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