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Interloper
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Deep in the heart

0 posted 2001-11-02 11:36 AM


Due to censorship, I am reposting this piece in a modified format so as not to offend the sensibilites of those readers which were offended by my work yet had not the intestinal fortitude to comment and show everybody they were offended.  

The original piece was removed without warning and without giving the author the chance to edit the offensive portion(s).
~*~
~*~
Traveling up North
No, farther North than that, Sven,
I met this sweet gal
~*~
she was inviting
warm and accommodating
and in love with me
~*~
her customs were quaint
living in a cold igloo
has its benefits
~*~
trying to get warm
everyone knows two bodies
will warm each other
~*~
I will spend the night
and this night is four months long
anticipation
~*~
I have prepared though
Ginseng and all vitamins
That I could ingest
~*~
we covered with skins
and slowly rubbed our noses
‘til I found her lips
~*~
what heat and passion
steam arose from our bodies
that’s when the ice broke



Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

[This message has been edited by Interloper (edited 11-02-2001).]

© Copyright 2001 The Tall Texan aka Doctor Love - All Rights Reserved
walker
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1 posted 2001-11-02 11:39 AM


I love this one, too bad the ice broke.
Duncan
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2 posted 2001-11-02 11:40 AM


Though I certainly wasn't offended by the first version, you are so kind to rewrite this for her.  (I didn't get the reasons, either...but who am I?)  Again, great poem for a so sweet lady.
SEA
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with you
3 posted 2001-11-02 11:51 AM


nothing you write offends me  

I like this....very nice....

Enchantress
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4 posted 2001-11-02 12:12 PM


I didn't see anything wrong with the first write...but, hey, that's me! Now, do I have to explain again that you went further north than where Sven lives in Michigan?  Hence the reason Sven is mentioned here?  Okay...that being said...these are a lot of fun and very well done Interloper!!
Carry on.....

  ~Time has cast a spell on you,
So that you won't ever forget me.~

SmittenKitten
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where the sky and horizon meet
5 posted 2001-11-02 12:25 PM



Aww, you got in trouble?  Well, I say it's all in good fun!   But I guess it's good to have a disclaimer, good idea.  

If you fell in the ice-cold water, wouldn't you need extra warming up now?    You've no excuse this time!

Hugs,
~Krista


Interloper
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6 posted 2001-11-02 12:29 PM


Walker ~
Yeah, I;ll bet you're all broken up over it

Duncan ~
Thank you for the kind comment.  I think asdkjfhfdf.
Darn those censors!

SEA ~
You are almost too easy to please.  I'll bet naldhfiasd.
those censors can go xammdfhklayh!

Enchantress ~
Thank you once again for making that crystal clear so the censors will not persecute Sven for associating with me.

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

Sven
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7 posted 2001-11-02 02:01 PM


now. . . why was I mentioned here again???    

I know that I offend a lot of people but. . . LOL  ROFL. . .  

well, whatever form it's in oh Great Voice of the Southland, it's still a great piece. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Startime
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8 posted 2001-11-02 03:01 PM


*giggling* I like them both but *sigh* the hotter one was very mmmmmm intriguing.

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

SmartChick
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9 posted 2001-11-02 04:02 PM


I wasn't offended! Too bad the ice broke.
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Gaia
10 posted 2001-11-02 05:15 PM


HUGS AND KISSES to all of you  

I wasn't offended and don't know what was wrong with the first version, which I didn't save, so there's nothing to compare this to. But thanks for reposting one, so I don't feel left out in the cold (pun intended).
I didn't sign on for the Adult forum, since I have a teenager here at home. Of course, she says 'her board' probably posts sexier more explicit things that Pips anyway. LOL, as she is no doubt right. Now I'm really tempted to visit the Adult forum.....

Nan
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11 posted 2001-11-02 05:40 PM


The good news for those of you who missed the first version, is that our moderator didn't remove it, but rather moved it to a more appropriate home in the Adult forum - You can still read it there.

Also, for the official administrative response on this issue, this thread, /pip/Forum6/HTML/000697.html should clarify any questions you all may have.

I hope this series, which was given special exemption from our guidelines, continues in the spirit of good clean Passionate fun...

rwood
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12 posted 2001-11-02 08:26 PM


Well....I'm sorry...I know I missed the first post! I see you're Having a little azz with your azz!!!   I had to do it! Hang...in there~pun intended!

Sincerely,
Regina

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