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Mon Cherie
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0 posted 2001-11-01 04:57 AM


I thought I love you.
Yes, I did.
Six years ago I was hurt.
So callous he was,
not considering my feelings.

But my feelings for him persisted,
it even grew.
From an innocent infatuation
to something unknown.
was it love?
How could it be?
I merely knew him better
than an acquaintance.
But it was no infatuation,
for I know he'd been
given a special place in my heart.

I prayed for courage to tell him.
I hoped I had a chance,
but I was never given one.
For six years it went on.
Tried to forget him,
but he kept on invading my thoughts.

As my mind matures,
it battles with my heart.
He is not worth it,
why can't I just give it up?
I left home,
venturing out into the world.
But a part of me still clings on
to the bittersweet memories.

As if awakening from a deep slumber,
I saw him -- the REAL him.
No more than an idol
that I'd placed on a pedestal.
Was I so naive?
Yes, I was.
I was rational once again,
and I knew he belonged in the past.
Tore up the letters and deleted the mails,
I threw him out of my mind.
His image faded gradually;
his hair, his eyes, his nose, his mouth.
Soon I'll be rid of the memories we shared.

Took me six years to hear the alarm,
but it was time well spent.
Tiring it was, to wait for someone,
and that's something I'd never do again.

But along the way,
I found real friends.
Those who seemed so wise,
always with the right answers
and a shoulder to cry on.

Press on, they said.
You should go on with your life.
Move on, I did.
Just waiting for the right man
to stop me in my tracks.

© Copyright 2001 Mon Cherie - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-11-01 09:59 AM


And he will too. Sometimes it takes us a long time to see the truth in another person because we can be so blinded by what our heart is feeling. I am glad you found out and also found the many friends you have around you. And yes someday a wonderful man will stop you in your tracks. BRAVO!!! A great poem.  

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Logan
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2 posted 2001-11-01 01:03 PM


Ahh, Mon Cherie, you have done what so many never are able to, and I applaud you for this, and yes, there will be a time for you, and all will sing...very gentle smile
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3 posted 2001-11-01 01:14 PM


Mon Cherie, your time shall come.  This is beautiful.


Press on, they said.
You should go on with your life.
Move on, I did.
Just waiting for the right man
to stop me in my tracks.

Someday......he will.  Nice write.


On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free.
~Me~

(I could have missed the pain, but I'd have had to miss the dance~Garth)

Martie
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4 posted 2001-11-01 07:35 PM


Mon Cherie--Many times strength comes from spending years...Wonderful poem of how you found yours!
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5 posted 2001-11-01 07:40 PM


lady, 6 years can be short compared to some who NEVER learn. I have no doubt your being stopped in your tracks will be a wonderful sight to behold  
Magnus
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6 posted 2001-11-01 07:46 PM


Nicely said....his loss I must say....
JamesMichael
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7 posted 2001-11-01 07:52 PM


Don't know if this is similar to your experience but at one time I wasted almost two years of my life trying to win a woman back that didn't want to come back to me...and due to circumstances she did start to return and about that same time my feelings were beginning to change drastically...and my final thoughts were why would I want to live with a woman that didn't really want to be with me and took two years to start looking my way again...so time does change the thoughts and I have learned to appreciate the woman that I am with at the moment...and if the appreciation is not mutual why continue the relationship...and who the heck should have to wait six years for satisfaction...
Liked the style of this particular poem...James

LoveLetters
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8 posted 2001-11-01 08:07 PM


A look into someone's mind and heart who learns and is constantly torn between letting go or holding on. Also a good expression of the growth that goes on during that time. Enjoyed.

Love has many masks. I am but one of them.

kaile
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9 posted 2001-11-01 08:41 PM


i really like this..you know how often i find these musings Hallmarkish...but this is different...you have written a common experience from your own perspective

you know how i always write comments like "i like this better than the previous"(so as to safeguard my skin..hee:P) but i think this musing is really cool

welcome to passions, dear and i hope you will enjoy your stay here...

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