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BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

0 posted 2001-10-31 01:14 PM

Have you ever felt consumed
as you watch him leave the room
when your eyes can only stare
the way he glances back at you

You see his shadow disappear
escaping from your view
while you sit there all alone
and there's nothing you can do

Have you ever felt consumed
as you danced the night away
waltzing slow across the floor
as the music softly played

When he dipped you real low
pressing close against your hips
the way he throws you for a loop
until your reservation slips

When you fell onto the couch
dripping sweat that made you tingle
pressing wet between your lips
your limbs that intermingled

Have you ever felt consumed
sitting close beside someone
lingering in thought
until you've finally come undone

At that moment when you fly~
so high above the sea
dreaming in the clouds
a place you never want to leave

Have you ever felt consumed
when you watch him leave the room
when your eyes can only stare
the way he glances back at you

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

1 posted 2001-10-31 01:29 PM

Yes, and yes to all - though it was "Her" or maybe "several her's"...but yes, all the time (hee hee)
Well asked and written...

jwesley

Accordionmaid
Member

since 2001-10-28

Posts 153
MA/USA

2 posted 2001-10-31 01:43 PM

Flows nicely, I really like this one.

Amber Dawn
Junior Member

since 2001-10-31

Posts 22
Minnesota

3 posted 2001-10-31 02:06 PM

Well I have! ~laughing~ Really good expression of emotion.

Suetang
Member Ascendant

since 2001-03-07

Posts 5187
Melbourne, Australia

4 posted 2001-10-31 06:06 PM

BluesSerenade
I felt totally consumed as I read this wonderful piece of writing. The imagery was exquisite and I'll look forward to reading more of your work. Take care......Sue

Suetang

Sven

Member Laureate

since 1999-11-23

Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA

5 posted 2001-10-31 07:05 PM

yes. . .

welcome. . . this is very well done. . . a moment captured. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

6 posted 2001-10-31 10:26 PM

wonderful cadence and passionate harmonies to this romantic gem.
Consumed is my middle name

Welcome to Poetry Land ...love your screen name...
so nice to have you here with us.

jm

This distance has shown how the road remains alone
Now I'm looking in my life ... for a truth that is my own.

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

7 posted 2001-10-31 10:33 PM

Yes, and yes to several hers and hims.
I like how you said that!  Hard to say who is glancing back at who.
Thank you so much jwesley.

The flow was a little 'sing songy'... I'm so happy you enjoyed and went with it.
I appreciate you taking the time to read Accordionmaid-en.

*smile*  Nice of you to say so Amber Dawn,
don't you just hate to see em leave?
At least they are taking another look before go?  Thanks for laughing....with me, I hope.

Thank you Sue for your nice compliments.  I have a hard time thinking of my poetry as being exquisite, I'm way too critical of myself.  I appreciate the boost of confidence, very much!!

Hi Sven, I've been reading in passions for some time, and I have enjoyed your poetry.  Thank you for sharing the moment,
and for welcoming me.

BluesSerenade~

Startime
Member Ascendant

since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

8 posted 2001-11-01 09:32 AM

*sigh* oh yes, and what a feeling it is. I lost myself in the whole feel of this poem. An absolute delight. I love it.

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

9 posted 2001-11-01 11:54 AM

Oh ya, and didn't you just want to carry that look around with you all day and night?
and see those eyes looking back at you at breakfast?
Thanks for the romantic memory.

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

10 posted 2001-11-02 12:35 PM

Your comments are delightful as well.
Thanks Startime.

It is a look I won't forget any time soon.
And yes, breakfast in bed sounds good right about now.

Thank you Midnitesun.

BluesSerenade~

Poet deVine

Administrator

Member Seraphic

since 1999-05-26

Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley

11 posted 2001-11-02 07:32 PM

Oh yes...I know this well. Nicely done!! And welcome!

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