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Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

0 posted 2001-10-30 08:00 AM

A step or two behind

Perhaps
a step or two behind
is where I felt the curve of you
tugging at me
like a small powerful boat
tossed by the sea

if I could steal a dreaming moment
shape it to curl over me stronger
than a passing wave
I would

I’d swim you
and feel the whirl of you behind it all

Dark Angel
30th October 2001

[This message has been edited by Dark Angel (edited 10-30-2001).]

Sudhir Iyer
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since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

1 posted 2001-10-30 08:05 AM

Such a refreshing spark....

Regards to you Maree,
Sudhir

catalinamoon

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since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

2 posted 2001-10-30 08:16 AM

Ah yes, I would also, if I could. Beautiful.
Sandra

Robert A
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since 2001-10-29

Posts 174

3 posted 2001-10-30 03:03 PM

This is nice, Dark Angel, real nice.

Nightshade

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since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

4 posted 2001-10-30 03:40 PM

Dark Angel, Lovely - enjoyed. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

Elizabeth

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since 1999-06-07

Posts 6871
Minnesota

5 posted 2001-10-30 05:36 PM

Those are lovely thoughts, and powerful. Well stated, Maree.

God bless America, my home sweet home.

furlong
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since 2001-04-08

Posts 129

6 posted 2001-10-30 05:37 PM

M

Ten hours later I still can't find anything to say to improve it ...lol. Is this a first?

Just very pleasant to read

... bet even old Sven can't disagree with that

F

Martie

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since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

7 posted 2001-10-30 07:49 PM

Hi Maree..you are always so original in the way you express a thought that I think, why didn't I think of that? As usual, you write well!

Aimster
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since 2000-02-19

Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC

8 posted 2001-10-30 09:36 PM

Maree,

impressive, as always. i really
enjoyed this piece, your word choice
was excellent, and your creative and
emotion as always superb! great write.
but then again, i truly expect no less
from a poet such as yourself.

Take care.
Love ya sweets,
Amy

"I could kiss you in
the rain forever.
Turn all of your pain to pleasure
Fill up your days with
sunlight, make the
passion last every night"

Balladeer

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since 1999-06-05

Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA

9 posted 2001-10-31 12:20 PM

Not a wasted word....or emotion. A step or two behind you would be a wonderful place to be....beautiful, Maree

Keith Morgan
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since 2001-10-29

Posts 114
Md

10 posted 2001-10-31 12:23 PM

Nicely written. I enjoyed the imagery and creativity.

SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19

Posts 2396

11 posted 2001-10-31 09:18 AM

~I just don't know what to do with myself. - Maree, this piece, I, sigh, you know how to crawl inside, to breathe yourself into words that translate into this essense of your presense, wow. And I love how you've structured it and added a piece of me to it's beauty. Thank you dear for lifting me with thought and word, when so very needed. Perhaps one day we will walk side by side, and chat about all the things we see and feel. *Peace to you and your lovely, lovely self. Thank you.

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

12 posted 2001-10-31 09:22 AM

Maree,
A misty breeze of wile, enjoyed.

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

13 posted 2001-11-01 01:11 AM

Sudhir:
as are your replies m'friend, I thank you!

catalina:
I thank you for stopping by and your lovely reply

Robert A:
Glad you liked! I thank you.

Nightshade:
I'm so glad you enjoyed and thank you for your lovely reply.

Elizabeth:
Thank you m'dear, so glad you liked and thanks for popping in for a read. So when are we going to get started on ours hmmm ?

Furlong:
Howdy Pard'ner, still like it after 10 hours hey? shucks I was waiting for one of your famous critique's hehe. But it is hard to critique on something when written for someone amazing hey? Oh btw...nope it isnt the first

I thank you dear friend.

Oh Martie:
you know how to make me feel good...that means so much coming from you, I thank you.

Amy:
dear Amy

You are always so kind with your replies dear friend, you've such a lovely heart. Hugs I thank you.

Balladeer:
Well thank you kind Sir!

Keith Morgan:
Thank you so very much, so glad you enjoyed.

Alicia:
I really am lost for words, apart from WOW!
Once more you have collapsed me.
This poem would not be the same without a piece of you m'friend

and I thank you. Perhaps one day we will walk side by side, and chat about all the things we see and feel. Yes, perhaps we will

a day I will look forward to.
Peace Hon.

Seymour:
Thank you for your lovely reply!

furlong
Member

since 2001-04-08

Posts 129

14 posted 2001-11-02 08:28 AM

M

What a lot of nice things you said in your reply - ty. Btw i forgot to say before, i especially loved the idea of "shaping a moment"

just had to mention that

F

Jamie
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since 2000-06-26

Posts 3168
Blue Heaven

15 posted 2001-11-03 06:43 PM

Poems like this are the anchors that allow us all to venture out beyond the breaker line. This is reminiscent of certain obscure influences that I think will continue for the two of us. Glad to see you writing dear.

J

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

16 posted 2001-11-03 06:49 PM

(big hugggsssssss) Soooooo beautiful! (sigh) Your sweet words are always so lovely and beautiful! I LOVE IT!!! (kiss on cheek) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet angel, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

wayoutwalt
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since 1999-06-22

Posts 4870
TEXAS (it's all big)

17 posted 2001-11-03 06:52 PM

So dreamy yuh

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

18 posted 2001-11-03 06:57 PM

'I’d swim you
and feel the whirl of you behind it all'

Now that is awesome!
Your poetry always has unique imagery.

Startime
Member Ascendant

since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

19 posted 2001-11-03 06:59 PM

I felt the waves of this beautiful poem wash over me leaving me with a feeling of total refreshment. BRAVO!!! I love it.

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

20 posted 2001-11-05 07:01 PM

Furlong:
i especially loved the idea of "shaping a moment" hmmm so do I, I just wish I could

Than you again m'friend.

Jamie:
Dear friend... yes I understand completely what you mean. I thank you for your lovely lovely reply. hugs

Mistletoe Angel:
You also have such a beautiful heart, and may love and light always shine upon you too. I thank you.

Walty:
Dreamy indeed! Thanks for stopping by and reading me

Midnitesun:
I have my inspiration to thank for that.
Thans for stopping by and reading

Startime:
So glad to have refreshed you. I appreciate your wonderful reply.

Maree.

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