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You Came Into My Room?
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You Came Into My Room? |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA 
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You came into my room last night? I could only sense that you were near. It was more a feeling, I can’t describe it. I felt warmth near me, was it you? A light touch brushed my cheek, I turned. A soft breeze felt across my neck, I shivered. slight touches along my sides, my thighs I thought I heard a soft moan, was it? A feeling of weight moving across the bed. Covers no longer smooth, caressed by a touch. The same fragrance of your pillow, in the air. Was it you there beside me, are you here? Reaching out, brushing smooth flesh, gone. Feeling the touch of toes against my leg. A softness pressing against my lips, I kiss air. Taste of roses, fresh upon my tongue, now gone. Feeling the peaks of your chest against me. Lightly touching the curves of my back. Fingers lightly parting my hair, my lips. The wetness of a kiss on each of my eyes. I said goodbye then, but now you are here. Or are you? |
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Amused Cupid Junior Member
since 2001-10-24
Posts 40 |
Wow, I love the wonder of this poem.  Was I just here reading it? Great expression, I really do love this, oh but I said that already.  |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Thank you....tis fun to write and feel the words...glad you enjoyed it. |
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RosePetal
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
Ok, it was me! I confess! I snuck into your room to watch you sleep, I couldn't help myself, you look like an angel when you sleep, heheh. Ok Ok all kidding aside I liked this very much. You have a way with your poetry. It's like you make me anxious to read the next line, you describe everything in a wonderful way. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
sssshhhhhhh. don't tell everyone...they aren't supposed to know....(kidding) Glad you like these...and I love to write them.... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Now you see her.....Now you don't!!! Watch out I just might disappear! POOF!! ~hugs, Nancy~ ....(it really was me  ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*grin* now this conjures up all kinds of visions but not one I would put in here. It would have to go in Adult to fit what I see. Could it have been me? Cute. Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Oh such a guessing game we have going here. Puts a funny grin on my face...contemplating the possibilities....hmmmmmmmm. let me see.. |
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PoetryIsLife
since 2001-10-27
Posts 1763...in my boxers... |
Enjoyed it! Truely a good write. Will we ever know just who 'tis was that night in your room?  Oh the mysteries of life...Sincerely, Titus "Old Men Love While Young Men Die" Kipling [This message has been edited by PoetryIsLife (edited 10-30-2001).] |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Thanx PoetryIsLife....(Titus)...welcome to Passions....hope to see you around for a while...Now I must seek some of your words... And yes....we do not know who was there? Or if it was just a dream....hmmmm? |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
This seems to have been written as a bit of fantasy, waking dreamlike...however, it felt quite real to me. Nice job, Magnus. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Thanx Duncan....sometimes gets really confusing about the dream, reality or fantasy part....I am sure you understand. |
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