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Dangerous Dressing
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Dangerous Dressing |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach 
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You complimented me on my intriguing attire You loved the feel of my silk blouse my satin skirt You drooled over my black, net stockings my stiletto heels You even commented on my tiny, pistol shaped diamond earrings What you obviously failed to notice though was that I was dressed to kill. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Whoaaaaa....this is good....I really liked the smack U in the face ending.... |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Magnus - Thanks for reading and I am glad you liked it. Chris  Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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The Lady of Shallot Senior Member
since 2001-10-03
Posts 818USA |
I love this, that last line!!!! what a keeper this is! -befriend yourself and you will never be alone- |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Lady of Shallot - Oh, I am so happy you liked it. thanks, Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Chris! You never cease to amaze me! The ideas you come up with during the day whilst alone! This is now one of my favourites you have done. You are incredible...and I'm not just saying that cuz...well, 'you know.'  Love ya, Teed. (bump) ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
NancyLee - So glad you liked it. That means alot to me. Who said I was alone while I was writing it? hee hee hee. hugs, Chris  Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Oh I like this, wow, go get him.... Sandra |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
very clever write NS...very cool poem.. you drew us in with the imagery and detail and then hit us with the impact of the last lines and did it all with succinct sharp vivid wording. very clever indeed. Well done poetess jm This distance has shown how the road remains alone |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Catalinamoon and Janet Marie - Thankyou both for taking the time to read and to make your comments. I apprecaite it very much. Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Like a little danger in my life sometime...James |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
Wow! This is very good. I really like it. |
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MyEnchanted_Melody Senior Member
since 2001-05-30
Posts 1106across the land of dreams. In your heart, I'd always be. |
Oh...yeah..."dressed to kill".. I liked the whole clever impact of this..... Thank you ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ |
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The Rusty Knight Member
since 2001-08-29
Posts 414Texas |
You got me on this one NightShade. Wow my little heart started going piter pater and then almost came to a hault on the last line. You need to warn us "older" fellas. When you start leading our mind down one road a sharp turn like that could be hard on our health. *S* I enjoyed the poem, even the "twisted" end. Death comes not when we cease to breathe, but when we cease to dream. |
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