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PoetryIsLife
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0 posted 2001-10-29 12:05 PM



Can you give it up?
Can you let it go?
Will you ever fill your cup?
Will you ever let it go?

Is it the meaning of your life,
or just another strife?

Do you want to touch it?!
Do you want too much of it?

It’s the saga of our life,
yet it’s just another strife.

There is no survival -
too strong is it’s pull.

Can you feel the pain?
Can you hear the thunder?
There never be no gain!
All it does is plunder.

Give it up!
Live it up!

What’s the way to go?

10/9/01

© Copyright 2001 Daniel Redding - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-10-29 12:29 PM


Do you want to touch it?!
Do you want too much of it?
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WOW talk about mirrors found in other's words..
this is my reflection blinding me.....
very cool poem...and cool screen name too  
Welcome to Poetry Land ...
so nice to meet you, I look forward to more of your work.
JM

This distance has shown how the road remains alone
Now I'm looking in my life ... for a truth that is my own.

The Rusty Knight
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2 posted 2001-10-29 01:32 PM


Very good write.

Death comes not when we cease to breathe, but when we cease to dream.

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Canada eh.
3 posted 2001-10-29 01:36 PM


Great write!!  Enjoyed enjoyed! ~hugs, Nancy~

  ~Time has cast a spell on you,
So that you won't ever forget me.~

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4 posted 2001-10-29 01:55 PM


Very nice. I really enjoyed this.

"I am nae poet, in a sense;
But just a rhymer like by chance..."
-Robert Burns

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5 posted 2001-10-29 02:14 PM


Interesting write. but I'm not ready to give it up, just yet.
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just out of reach
6 posted 2001-10-29 02:26 PM


PoetryIsLife - very well done. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

PoetryIsLife
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7 posted 2001-10-29 02:47 PM


Thank you all!

Titus

"Old Men Love While Young Men Die" Kipling

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8 posted 2001-10-29 04:56 PM


interesting, very interesting  

-befriend yourself and you will never be alone-

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