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crazy4u
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since 2001-10-28
Posts 67


0 posted 2001-10-29 02:05 AM


Soothing serene sounds whisper
Softly in my ear the things im yearning to hear
From you, my solace, and my secret from the world.

At the murmur of the chirping crickets
I laugh, not even their rhythmic song can shut
These heavy eyes which crave relief
Because it is you I breathe
And you I think and you I dream
Therefore I cant sleep

Satisfy me and bring me bliss
Undo the confusion of your abyss
And tell me once and for all that im
What you need and what you breathe
And what you will forever hold.

[This message has been edited by crazy4u (edited 10-29-2001).]

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serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

1 posted 2001-10-29 02:51 AM


lovely, but why confused as to "undisclosed"---are ya talking about your feelings, THEIR feelings, or your identity? grinning here,
but truly I understand and sympathize.

doreen peri
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since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812
Virginia
2 posted 2001-10-30 01:11 PM


quote:
Because it is you I breathe
And you I think and you I dream


great lines!

i enjoyed the alliteration.... this one rolls off the tongue... should be read aloud

fine writing here  

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