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Tracey
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since 2001-08-29

Posts 2808
where insanity meets breeding

0 posted 2001-10-28 08:43 PM

Lovers Dance of Sweet Romance

As lovers dance a waltz so fine
And bask in rays of sweet sunshine
Can I have this dance with you
And dance on grass still wet with dew
We’ll dry our tears of long ago
Spring will melt away the snow
Our feet will barely touch the floor
As we sing romance once more

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

[This message has been edited by Tracey (edited 10-28-2001).]

Honeybee
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since 1999-12-26

Posts 5372
Ontario, CANADA

1 posted 2001-10-28 08:49 PM

Tracey, this is divine! I love it ~ short and sweet with excellent flow, rhyme and sentiment

Take care,
Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

Aimster
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since 2000-02-19

Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC

2 posted 2001-10-28 09:19 PM

Tracey,

this was a very beautiful poem.
the rhyme is perfect in it. very
lovely sentiments from your pen.

take care.
amy

"I could kiss you in
the rain forever.
Turn all of your pain to pleasure
Fill up your days with
sunlight, make the
passion last every night"

Wanda
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since 2001-10-23

Posts 461

3 posted 2001-10-28 09:41 PM

Tracey; This is such a special poem. It is very short, but says so very much. Good writing. Wanda

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

4 posted 2001-10-28 09:45 PM

Tracey! I just love this!
It's dances beautifully on the page.
Just perfect!!
~hugs, Nancy~

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So that you won't ever forget me.~

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

5 posted 2001-10-28 10:17 PM

Tracey - Just a sweet poem!! hugs, Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

Nate Dogg
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since 1999-11-15

Posts 1658
Georgia, Fulton

6 posted 2001-10-28 11:25 PM

Nicely done!

Nathan

Tracey
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since 2001-08-29

Posts 2808
where insanity meets breeding

7 posted 2001-10-28 11:26 PM

Melissa, Amy, Wanda, Nancy and Chris, thank you, so glad you enjoyed this. Actually, this was going to be the beginning of a poem, but I never got around to finishing it, and it seemed as though it could stand alone. Now I'm not so sure and may go back and finish it

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

Tracey
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since 2001-08-29

Posts 2808
where insanity meets breeding

8 posted 2001-10-28 11:26 PM

Ah, NateDog, you slipped in on me there. Thank you

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

DawnG

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since 2000-06-23

Posts 1494
United States

9 posted 2001-10-28 11:36 PM

I definately think it will be great whether you let it stand alone or finish it. This is a true beauty.

Dawn

Duncan
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since 2001-08-07

Posts 5455

10 posted 2001-10-29 01:53 AM

Dance upon dew graced grass
freedom from loves ghost at last
barefoot I will sway with you
until we both sing anew
this is corny
but that is me
just a southern boy
lost in your poetry
let's dance

Domzi
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since 2001-09-08

Posts 288
New York (BK)

11 posted 2001-10-29 02:38 AM

Your words come together nicely on the page. Liked the read!

As my borough has always stated- Do or Die.

rwood
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since 2000-02-29

Posts 3793
Tennessee

12 posted 2001-10-29 06:56 AM

Pefectly penned! I will save this and remember the sweet song it sings.

Sincerely,
Regina

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

13 posted 2001-10-29 08:12 AM

Tracey, I like it just as is, gets the happy and hopeful feeling across just perfectly.
Sandra

Tracey
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since 2001-08-29

Posts 2808
where insanity meets breeding

14 posted 2001-10-29 11:03 AM

Dawn, thank you so much for your kind words

Duncan,
Corny? No, for this is sweet
You make the dance start in my feet
I’ll dance with you under the sky
Like winged doves we’ll fly so high
And can you hear the melody?
They play it just for you and me
If there is truth in dreams come true
This dream was made for me and you

Domzi, thank you and yes…do or die… wise words indeed

Regina, I’m glad you enjoyed it. I very much enjoyed your poem this morning..that didn’t just sing…it rocked!!!

Sandra, glad you liked it *hugs*

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