Open Poetry #16 |
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behind the cold facade |
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crazy4u Member
since 2001-10-28
Posts 67 |
A glass of red wine burns it’s way down to my stomach For the bite of the frost agonized my soul And the chill of your answer froze my heart. A hot tear released that stains my face Because I kissed you with warmth And you betrayed me with lies An icy wind sends steam out of my head Since you told the tale convincingly bright I was duped by your scorching touch, sightless by love, tormented by the truth, And touched by the way you deceived me so well. |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Wow, this really hurts. I can feel the pain and anger here. Well written though. Welcome to passions, bring your glass of wine and settle in for a while If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Crazy4u, this is stunning and my compliments 2u on this magnificent poem... I very much enjoyed this read and thankU4sharing this with all us here... *~coco~* [This message has been edited by CocoBaci (edited 10-28-2001).] |
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SmittenKitten Senior Member
since 2001-06-20
Posts 1131where the sky and horizon meet |
crazy4u~Very powerful first post. I liked the contrast of cold and heat to emphasize your emotions. ![]() ![]() Make yourself at home ![]() Hugs, ~Krista ![]() Your beautiful words & creativity allow me to connect with the same in myself. |
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Midnitesun![]()
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
WOW. Congratulations on a great first post! Welcome. ![]() OOH, this poem hurts good. ![]() |
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crazy4u Member
since 2001-10-28
Posts 67 |
Tracey, Coco, kitten and Midniteson..I thank all of you for your kind words and for welcoming in... i can already see this is a great place. much love xoxo |
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DawnG![]() ![]()
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
crazy4u, This is a very powerful poem to enter into Passions with. I like it very much. Welcome to Passions. I hope you enjoy your stay with us as much as we will enjoy having you. Please check your e mail for a special greeting. Dawn |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Welcome to the family! Your poem is very intense and vivid. I certainly look forward to reading more from you. ![]() |
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Ariana Senior Member
since 2000-10-08
Posts 571Orlando, Florida |
Welcome to Passions. You will find many new friends. Your expression of hurt and anger is very good and I look forward to more of your writings. Welcome again! |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Welcome to Passions Crazy4u! This is a powerful first post, very nicely composed ... I hope to read more. ![]() Best wishes, /Kit |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Welcome to Passions. You are a welcome addition to our family. Karilea If I whisper, will you listen?... I would rather be silent and write, than speak loudly and be bound. KRJ [This message has been edited by Sunshine (edited 10-28-2001).] |
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The Rusty Knight Member
since 2001-08-29
Posts 414Texas |
Welcome to Passions. I like your first post and know you will find many friends here. Death comes not when we cease to breathe, but when we cease to dream. |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Nice to have you among us, crazy4u - Welcome aboard - Settle in and make yourself comfy. I've enjoyed this poem, and look forward to reading more of your work... ![]() |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
![]() Enjoyed your first post!! I'll be looking for more from you! ~NancyLee~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
much feeling in this one...very awesome... big welcome to passions! hope to see more of your work! hugs, g ~dgvarner/fallen rain~ |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Absolutely stunning is this first post. Its powerful read is filled with emotion. BRAVO. Welcome to Passions. *grin* as you can already see they are all a great bunch of people with very loving hearts. ![]() Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Magnus![]() ![]()
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
You know of course.... That you never play your trump card first. If this is not.....I can hardly wait to see the next one....Nice poem....superb emotions....welcome to Passions.. |
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Nightshade![]() ![]() ![]() ![]()
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
crazy4u - Welcome to Passions!! I enjoyed your first post and look forward to more. Very good. Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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crazy4u Member
since 2001-10-28
Posts 67 |
wow guys! im speechless thank you for all the wonderful feedback and the greeting cards i loved them.. i can tell im going to like this place. |
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