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janmew
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0 posted 2001-10-27 06:47 PM



Would you lay with me in the fields of gold,
As the warm breeze kissed our hair?
Would you wrap me in your arms and hold,
til the sun was no longer there?

Would you comfort me while storm clouds rolled,
through days of ice and snow?
Would you gladly watch each season unfold
through happy times and woe?

Would you kiss me as the night grew cold,
while the time passed slowly by?
Would you Love me till we both grew old
with a Love too strong to die?

Poetry is an expression of feelings.  I do not write poems, but rather, the poems use me to write themselves.

© Copyright 2001 Jan - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-10-27 06:49 PM


Jan, PERFECT....just....PERFECT!!  ~hugs, Nancy~

  ~Time has cast a spell on you,
So that you won't ever forget me.~

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2 posted 2001-10-27 06:51 PM



Oh, I think I'm going to like having you around!

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3 posted 2001-10-27 06:57 PM




(smiles) This beautiful poem reminds me of the song "Fields of Gold" by Sting. (big hugggssssss) Oh Jan, it's so wonderful to read your beautiful words here, you have such beautiful talent! (smiles) Sooooooo lovely! More, more!!! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Jan, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton



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4 posted 2001-10-27 06:58 PM


I can relate to these words so well,  I
could sit here and sing this...And that means
it is just right....Thanx.

janmew
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5 posted 2001-10-27 06:59 PM


Thank you all, you are making me feel so welcome. I have so many poems I don't want to overload the board!   I am so glad you like them though!

Jan

Poetry is an expression of feelings.  I do not write poems, but rather, the poems use me to write themselves.

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6 posted 2001-10-27 07:33 PM


OH YES!!!OH YES!!!You will fit in beautifully here. Your words of love flow like a warm breeze across the page. Absolutely beautiful.  

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

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7 posted 2001-10-27 07:48 PM


Jan, you can post things like this often.
I enjoy both your words and your style.

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8 posted 2001-10-27 07:55 PM


Very nice indeed!  
I enjoyed!

Maree

janmew
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9 posted 2001-10-28 03:47 PM


Thanks for everyone's comments  

[This message has been edited by janmew (edited 10-28-2001).]

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