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Lay Down Your Arms
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Lay Down Your Arms |
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wornways Member
since 2001-10-18
Posts 204CA, USA |
Lay Down Your Arms Dark raging war is ended, lay down your arms; Let broken days wax mended, lay down your arms. Great storm past at last, seas dream in placid rest; No more great threats now scended, lay down your arms. From out the dark, fresh beginnings bright draw nigh; New hopes may yet be tended, lay down your arms. Time is come to free grim resentments and harms; Let brave new ways go wended, lay down your arms. Tread forth into fantastic revealing quest; Let heal life long upended, lay down your arms. Unfetter questions deep, free them as a sigh; Answers will be extended, lay down your arms. Release reactions learned to faithless alarms, And grasp judgements emended, lay down your arms. Make not bitter hatreds drear a place to nest; From sorrows rise transcended, lay down your arms. Oh Zahaar, old warrior, let the fighting lie, And past wrongs be amended, lay down your arms. [This message has been edited by wornways (edited 10-27-2001).] |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
I like this. It has a definite lyrical quality, though I'm not sure of the form, so I'll not atempt a critique, just a comment, that I like the messages you presented. |
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wornways Member
since 2001-10-18
Posts 204CA, USA |
thank you for your thoughts!  the form, yes, it's a ghazel. if you're curious what that is, send me an email, people have been asking me about ghazels a lot lately, as i've taken to writing a series of them, and i have a template email written to explain them to those who are curious. the information i provide is much clearer than what the online texts offer, and is derived from several sources both online and in print (spent a few hours at my college library with the head librarian getting all the facts straight). anyway, thanks again. warm fuzzies all over when i learn someone enjoyed reading something i wrote. |
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