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once a lion |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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"I wish that we had never met-- for now you own my very breath. Every waking thought consumed, and all my dreams are dreams of you." "Truly, you are witch," he said... "or healer to awaken dead. I smell your scent upon the breeze-- I feel your fingers tracing me. Drawing me in grace of ease... once a lion, now appeased. And should at first I meet my death, I'll haunt this earth, to breathe your breath. I'll fly the night to kiss your screams in hopes I have a part in dreams..." a single tear rode down his cheek-- proof of his sincerity... "Oh" I said, "You're poetry..." "No." He wept. "I'm only me." He silenced me with depth of eyes and cradled me to my surprise... "I shall not leave you, not with ease." And still? I find it hard to breathe. I still feel his stroke of hair. Every breath I breathe--he's there. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Every waking thought consumed, and all my dreams are dreams of you." ====================================== I smell your scent upon the breeze-- I feel your fingers tracing me. ================================= And should at first I meet my death, I'll haunt this earth, to breathe your breath. =================================== "Oh" I said, "You're poetry..." "No." He wept. "I'm only me." =================================== He silenced me with depth of eyes ================================== And still? I find it hard to breathe. I still feel his stroke of hair. Every breath I breathe--he's there. =================================== mirror mirror on the wall I felt every perfect word, one and all......... |
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Masked Intruder
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Senior Member
since 1999-05-23
Posts 1231Near golden sunsets |
Karen, karen, karen.... I'm quite impressed at your narrative powers. I wish I could talk in rhyme like that, it would make me so much cooler. But so sad, so sad. I'd cry if I wasn't so hyper, y'know. You can't wake a person who is pretending to be asleep. -- Navajo Proverb |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Lioness~ Cool ! "Oh" I said, "You're poetry..." *smiles* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Dee Member Elite
since 2000-08-19
Posts 2330Queensland, Australia |
Serenity, truly beautiful. Loved it all. Dee |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
Poetry indeed - This is lovely, serenity..  |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
"I wish that we had never met-- for now you own my very breath. Every waking thought consumed, and all my dreams are dreams of you." "Truly, you are witch," he said... "or healer to awaken dead. I smell your scent upon the breeze-- I feel your fingers tracing me. well..I don't know what to say...sometimes I believe there is a bit of you in me...or me in you...*s wonderfully written K ~Wynter |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
A cool write, Serenity! Yes, indeed, you ARE poetry   Take care, Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
"I wish that we had never met-- for now you own my very breath. Every waking thought consumed, and all my dreams are dreams of you." I still feel his stroke of hair. Every breath I breathe--he's there. Excellent write m'sista, especially loved the lines above the most. I love where your poetry takes me dear. Thank you Maree |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Karen, you are poetry! ~* If you want a rainbow, sometimes you just have to put up with a little rain *~ |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh this is sooo good!!! Enjoyed. ~Time has cast a spell on you |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I'm glad to know that you all enjoyed...this is another I have no idea where it came from...wasn't even supposed to go where it did! ---smiles and my gratitude. With love to all! |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
Just go with the flow serenity, this is excellent! "Let me pierce the realm of glamour |
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Apachecat906 Member
since 2001-09-04
Posts 217Michigan, USA |
WOW I never get choked up. Really. This poem is awesomely tender and powerful. I love it when I cant even pick out a favorite line! Although this part really got me: a single tear rode down his cheek-- proof of his sincerity... "Oh" I said, "You're poetry..." "No." He wept. "I'm only me." It took my breath too Thank you  |
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The Rusty Knight Member
since 2001-08-29
Posts 414Texas |
Lovely poem and so fluid....love the breath and breathe use....some things make us feel someones warm breath on the back of our neck. I just had to turn around and look behind me. Dan Death comes not when we cease to breathe, but when we cease to dream. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
serenity- This is awesome! "Oh" I said, "You're poetry..." Love it! Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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Alison
since 2008-01-27
Posts 9318Lumpy oatmeal makes me crazy! |
I loved every line of this story, Karen. A |
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