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Waiting for Me
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Waiting for Me |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Heaven stands a step away from me... With a hint of your air I’m destined-- Onward to a moonlit night of reflection. This collaboration of hearts points me in the direction of a particular gesture of intimacy. This range of sight is breathtaking To one such as me, not readily familiar with opening my eyes to a halo of sunset around the horizon... Embrace my spoken phrase before the crimson lessens; Catch my eyes before the glimmer fades. Tell me what I’m thinking, like you always do; Draw from me the passion we came here to find... Take me from the obsessive nature of the wayward stars and give to me the composure of the waterfall... Baby, I’ll never forget the morning I awoke to find you waiting for my eyes; I relocated closer to your arms as we watched the haze of the silent railroad tracks just beyond the window... -kh And did you know with the rain in your pockets, |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
if I ever need a serano, guess who it will be? *wink* absolutely lovely! ~Tier |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Oh my...this is breathtaking! Excellent writing and so full of lovely love!! |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
K, This was beautiful sweets! As always you write with perfect imagery. It astounds me sometimes in which the depth that you've write...as I've said you've grown by leaps and bounds and it's been wonderful to watch you develop! take care amy  "I could kiss you in |
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chasing rain Senior Member
since 2001-05-15
Posts 737Canada |
Incredibly beautiful...Amazingly written. Love the flow. ^_^ From the two poems I've read by you, I'm very impressed with the quality. You left me speechless... ++ Leah ++ Va pensiero sull' ali dorate... |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
Wonderfully expressed!  Love writes you very well!  Take care, Melissa~ "Poetry is not an opinion expressed... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Heaven stands a step away from me... With a hint of your air I’m destined-- Onward to a moonlit night of reflection. ================================= Embrace my spoken phrase before the crimson lessens; Catch my eyes before the glimmer fades. Tell me what I’m thinking, like you always do; Draw from me the passion we came here to find... Take me from the obsessive nature of the wayward stars and give to me the composure of the waterfall... Baby, I’ll never forget the morning I awoke to find you waiting for my eyes; ======================================= This is fabulous writing Kris... I really love this one..(hard not to from my view) I love the comparisons and anologies of nature, imagery and emotion... you always do that so well...but this one is more personal than ethereal and I see so much of your "inspire" in this...(again...biased) "Tell me what I’m thinking, like you always do" careful there girlie...that will make a certain Aquarian's ego swell... makes him right AGAIN (blahblah)  very very cool poem Poetess K This distance has shown how the road remains alone |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Wow, this is so cool! "Embrace my spoken phrase before the crimson lessens; Catch my eyes before the glimmer fades. Tell me what I’m thinking, like you always do; Draw from me the passion we came here to find... Take me from the obsessive nature of the wayward stars and give to me the composure of the waterfall..." Whew! I had to copy and paste half the poem to highlight what I liked best.  |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
It was all beautiful but I loved these two lines for in them is absolute trust in someone to make you all that you can be, in otherwords a soulmate... Take me from the obsessive nature of the wayward stars and give to me the composure of the waterfall... ~*~ Carpe' Diem ~*~ |
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Irish Rose Member Patricius
since 2000-04-06
Posts 10263 |
Oh, I long for this, this feeling! I have to respond to this, I love it!! Kathleen |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Such a sweet love song. Happy for your happiness. Sandra |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
SnowPants~ 'Embrace my spoken phrase before the crimson lessens, Catch my eyes before the glimmer fades' I'm thinking perhaps this 'glimmer' will not fade~  Beautifully expressive~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
I so love the moments when I have the time to enjoy the poetry here like I used to and finding this piece is a treat indeed....beautiful write with such a perfect mix of imagery and warmth, I know the one it's intended for will be most touched by the words you wove here..and we are lucky to have read this as well. Beautiful write~ |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* This is so very beautiful. What a wonderful feeling of love flows from your words. I love it.Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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snowpants Member Elite
since 2000-09-16
Posts 2061KS |
Tier: well, it'd be my pleasure! thanks...glad you could stop by! Martie: thank you! I'm glad you liked it! Aims: hey there...thanks so much, girlie...I truly appreciate your kind compliments! -e Leah: well, thank you...I am most flattered...I appreciate your reply! Melissa: thanks...I'm glad you liked it! J: yeah, I was feelin' this one more than usual, too...and, yeah, I'll be careful to use lines like that sparingly... ...wouldn't want to have to grease someone's head through the door...  ...thanks girlie...glad you liked it!  Midnitesun: well, thank you...that is a great compliment...I'm happy you liked it! Mysteria: yes, and that is how I feel too...thank you so much...glad you liked this! Kathleen: well, I'm glad you did...I truly appreciate your reply! thanks! Sandra: thank you, my friend...you will know this feeling, too...I'm glad you liked this! Marge: I'm thinkin' the same thing... ...thank you, my friend...glad you could stop by! Butterflies: well, it is, indeed, a pleasure to have you reply to my work, too...thank you so much...great to see ya! Startime: thanks so much...I truly appreciate your reply! sp  And did you know with the rain in your pockets, |
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Robert A Member
since 2001-10-29
Posts 174 |
very colorful lines, almost like reading something soft from your emotions! |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
beautifully and so colorfully expressed. Great work...thanx. |
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