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revisiting continues... |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium 
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they shone brightly the sprinkling star dusts trailing behind the falling comet into the canopy full of twinklers almost as much as your eyes did when they threw sparkles reflecting the candle lights during the nights of our love then with the passing of time, the trail of lights dimmed into the darkness of the night almost the same as the way you took your eyes and looked away I saw the fading light I still see our faded love and the walked paths of yesterdays one year? |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
they shone brightly the sprinkling star dusts trailing behind the falling comet into the canopy full of twinklers almost as much as your eyes did when they threw sparkles reflecting the candle lights during the nights of our love then with the passing of time, the trail of lights dimmed into the darkness of the night ==================================== Sud...this is so beautiful.... so bittersweetly sad..but so lovely in its intend...wonderful employ of ethereal imagery we must revisit to move forward... for with every write of memories ... in the release of the words...comes more healing. well done dear poet sir. heart-hugs to you jm This distance has shown how the road remains alone |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Hi Sudhir: How well you compare the sky and love..the road, bright and dim, does indeed seem similar. Best regards to you, my friend. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Sudhir, A lovely write my friend. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
I like the way you used the fading stars and candlelight imagery to allow the emotions of fading love to flicker through your poem. |
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DawnG
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
Sudhir, I can relate to this one very well. Dawn |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Many thanks to all of you... and many regards, as well, Sudhir |
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