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Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

0 posted 2001-10-24 04:17 PM

I thought I knew you. I thought I knew your heart.
I guess I was wrong, I never knew you at all.
How I wish I did, how I yearn for those moments.
My soul aches from the absence of your touch.
My lips, dry and cracked, thirst for your kiss.
My mind, a twisted mass of tissue, lies numb.

You told me I no longer was for you.
You asked me to leave, to open and step out.
The cold on my face chills me.
The cold of your heart freezes me.
I am lost without your love, please return.

I cannot forget those warm nights beside you.
You, in your beauty, sleeping peacefully.
My heart fluttered as I watched you.
Now my eyes no longer see, my heart is blind.

Two years of passion, love, joy, adventure....cast away.
Why must I leave now? What have I done ever so wrong?
Can I be forgiven for a wrong that I do not understand?
Will you ever again open the door to your heart?

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

1 posted 2001-10-24 04:27 PM

I was just thinking earlier how easy it is to forgive someone that you genuinely care for and how hard it is to forgive someone that you no longer care for...at some point in time people do stop caring...due to issue's of being hurt or it happened one to many times...hopefully she hasn't been hurt one to many times and she does still have a soft place in her heart for you...James

RosePetal

Member Elite

since 2001-08-26

Posts 2985
South Florida

2 posted 2001-10-24 04:28 PM

Oh my, I can feel the saddness in this.
Sometimes people change, and they want to separate to grow as a person.
If it was meant to be then they will come back to you! And remember...the line on your fishing pole goes on!
Best Wishes always

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

3 posted 2001-10-24 04:34 PM

JM....I am happy to say that I have been
married for hummmmm....32 years....our
share of rocks in the road....but this poem
is just part of my writing....thank you for
your words, and your concerns...I hope I
don't have to write this for real.

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

4 posted 2001-10-24 04:36 PM

RosePetal....sorry that seems so real.  That
is just my style.  I can get deep into
romance.   Must have been all of the girls
I loved that never loved me years ago...
But I didn't write then....My loss.  Thanx
for the comment.

Startime
Member Ascendant

since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

5 posted 2001-10-24 08:17 PM

WOW!!!Did you ever get me going with this one. It is their loss for sure. This is heart wrenching. Magnificent writing, Magnus.

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

6 posted 2001-10-24 08:24 PM

Thanx Karen....tried to get deep on this one.
but you shld read the next one. And you
might like the ending.....breaking too many
hearts with sadness. thanx again.

walker
Member Elite

since 2001-02-11

Posts 2240
Florida

7 posted 2001-10-24 08:26 PM

Great poem, I'm glad is not your experience. But it is for many. Well expressed.

Mistletoe Angel

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since 2000-12-17

Posts 32816
Portland, Oregon

8 posted 2001-10-24 08:28 PM

(big hugggssssss) Oh Magnus, this is so so sad! My heart cries out to you, though deep down they missed the wonderful person you are and wish they had such a beautiful person like you! (sigh) My heart cries out to your sorrow, dearest friend! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Magnus, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

Domzi
Member

since 2001-09-08

Posts 288
New York (BK)

9 posted 2001-10-25 02:42 AM

This poem is filled with a lot of sadness. I wish people didn't have to go through such things. Great poem!

BtwnRockandHardPlace
Member

since 2001-10-23

Posts 98
NJ, USA

10 posted 2001-10-25 01:59 PM

Wow - you have such a sensitive heart. I know this was not reality. No woman would cast out a man whose heart goes this deep.

*~*~*~*~
Benita
*~*~*~*~
The truth of the matter is that you always know the right thing to do. The hard part is doing it.
-Gen. Schwarzkoff

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

11 posted 2001-10-25 03:35 PM

Thanx Walker....happy you enjoyed the read.
Yes, I am pleased that I have not had to
experience this....though so many have. Both
the ladies and the guys..

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

12 posted 2001-10-25 03:37 PM

Noah....don't agonize....it was just fantasy
writing....not real to me....thanx..

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

13 posted 2001-10-25 03:39 PM

BtwnRock.....

Yes, not reality....and yes...my wife has
begun to become aware that this man she
lives with has a very big heart....just never
did express well...But I am learning...always
learning.

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

14 posted 2001-10-25 03:40 PM

Domzi....thanx...yes,  I wish it never
happened to any one.  but that is the only
way we grow in love.  We sometimes have to
learn the hard way....all of us.  Me too.

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