Open Poetry #16 |
methinks |
serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Mercury has gone direct--- but things are not quite better yet. Quicksilver of the liquid shine-- I thought my words could make you mine. I thought if I danced long enough I'd show you that I had the stuff-- I thought if you would hear me sing you'd not want for anything... And should I draw the world anew a portrait painted rainbow'd dew-- I thought if I wrote poetry, surely then, you would love me. Tiny stitches, delicate, each thread a dream that I once wept... I painted my lips ruby red in hopes that you'd kiss mine instead. I thought I thought of everything-- I think too much, I think, methinks... |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Serenity, this brought a tear of remembrance to my eye. You don't know how much I have felt this myself. (Mind you, I'd like to be able to pen it as well as you do ) If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Just read it again. Had to add it to the library. Don't mind me, I'll be very quiet here in the library!!! If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Just be yourself. That should always be enough. I loved the imagery in this one and it is one that leaves a person thinking. Wonderful work, Karen. Michael Michael Auguste~ |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Me thinks too much sometimes too, but I can't pen my thoughts as poetically as you. 'I thought my words could make you mine. I thought if I danced long enough I'd show you that I had the stuff-- I thought if you would hear me sing you'd not want for anything...' I remember doing that song and dance a time or two. It never worked for me either. |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
You touch my heart in this one sweetie... *~coco~* |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
I thought Pluto far and small from site Beauty and love on a visual night Shining gold in distant dust Appearing at dawn or dusk Solar winds blow kisses when In mating call to the hen Silent space an empty place Until the words from your face Kiss me now, you know how The rooster awakes and then the cow Bird’s sing loud of happiness It’s a good morning I must confess But I prefer you here in bed Instead And reapply your ruby red The animals will get fed I thought you’d think me thoughts I think Thinking the thoughts of you I thought |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Trace, Michael, Coco and Midnite---I hug ya to my heart with gratitude... BUT.... insect? That poem is worthy of its own post...I do INSIST....for me? purty please? Hugs to m'baby! (serenity exits, pouting ruby red lips....) [This message has been edited by serenity (edited 10-23-2001).] |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
Pretty pouting ruby red Purty please you said Huggy wuggies for you my friend An inspiration it stays to the end But there was something I forgot to do At the top, should have read…For You But you insist And I better resist A twinkling star and written in blue It must stay close to you |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
And you are so sweet? YOU'RE DANGEROUS. hmmm...or perhaps IN danger? evil me....I will leave you in ponder of that thought! Thank you, for the response, I do so love being pleased twice! (and so quickly too! ) |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Methinks.... I do like your style... methinks.... I'll languish here a while Methinks.... Some hearts are shown each day methinks.... Your words have much to say. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Quicksilver of the liquid shine-- I thought my words could make you mine. ======================================== And should I draw the world anew a portrait painted rainbow'd dew-- I thought if I wrote poetry, surely then, you would love me. Tiny stitches, delicate, each thread a dream that I once wept... =========================================== (reflected *sigh* AGAIN) pass the Windex baby... me thinks its my turn to clean the mirrors OH...and....... this line????.............. "Quicksilver of the liquid shine-- I thought my words could make you mine." *shaking me head at you* (again) and wishing I had wrote this poem. me thinks I have now This distance has shown how the road remains alone |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Janet and Ron...two of my favorite people, how could I forget to thank you...I know YOU know, but it's still nice to hear, "thank you" and love to you both! |
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rwood Member Elite
since 2000-02-29
Posts 3793Tennessee |
Me thinks you are great! Me wishes you smiles! Sincerely, Regina |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
You did it again, girl, just what I was thinking, in such a less maudlin way than I could have said it. Great write. And I am on my way to new Orleans, I need a party SOON. Sandra |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(smiles) And i think that you have such a beautiful loving heart that will touch so many so deeply like me! (smiles) Your beautiful words are always so wonderful and they surely touch a man's heart every day! (big hugggssssss) We all love you so much, sweet friend! (kiss on cheek) You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
My oh My Karen! Sighing. Hugging you gorgeous creature! Maree |
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walker Member Elite
since 2001-02-11
Posts 2240Florida |
Love this one, sometimes we assume that our sacrifices can make others happy. But some people have a shell that can't be broken, it's life. |
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