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jellybeans
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0 posted 2001-10-22 05:28 PM


Through my defenses
you found a way...so I walked
the length and breadth,
examined it from both sides
and found no chinks.
It was as sturdy as dictated to be.
With no deficiencies found, I could not
decipher how you gained entrance.
I set up surveillance
to watch your every move;
a simple shutter click will seize
the moment.

Stunned, I stare at the proof,
a tiny hole, right next to my heart.
I had undoubtedly left it
unguarded, thinking the No
Trespassing sign would be
protection enough. It wasn't.
Black and white does not lie.
You slipped in tongue first
just like a snake,
with thoughts of finding somewhere safe
and warm to set up stake.

Out upon the dark waters, where
strong wings keep my soul from
dipping dangerously low...Resolution
calls out...Michael row the boat ashore,
the rainy days have passed,
it's time
for a freeze.

Alleluia Amen

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Mistletoe Angel
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1 posted 2001-10-22 07:19 PM




(big hugggssssss) Oh dearest friend, I'm so sorry you had to go through all of this but I'm so happy your heart cries out for resolution and hope shines in your words! (sigh) Your golden heart has wings that will lift you to what you're destined to find of your dreams! (sigh) Powerfully bittersweet poem, dearest friend! You have such a beautiful heart, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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2 posted 2001-10-22 07:56 PM


It's the tongue that gets you  
No, seriously, this was not what I expected and I was delighted to read this!

-befriend yourself and you will never be alone-

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3 posted 2001-10-24 10:10 AM


Stunned, I stare at the proof,
a tiny hole, right next to my heart.
I had undoubtedly left it
unguarded, thinking the No
Trespassing sign would be
protection enough. It wasn't.

Nope... No matter how hard we try to protect our hearts, they manage to find a way to let in hope. After too many losses, we fear that hope, knowing hurt usually follows.
If you get that divine intervention, could you send some my way? *S* Or at least let me take over the surveillance duties??? *EG*
Great writing... I like this much!

jellybeans
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4 posted 2001-10-25 02:25 PM


well lady, I know you like this, it still doesn't sit well with me, so will say thank you quietly and after the fact  

thank you much all  

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5 posted 2001-10-25 04:40 PM


I wasn't sure I wanted to read this at first because of the title,  since we are already frozen to the ground here. Glad I changed my mind, as I think it is excellent. And after the freeze comes the big thaw. We call it breakup here. Hope that doesn't apply to your situation.
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