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What We Were |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
The grove was vibrant with a backdrop of green Covered with profusion of wildflowers seen Aspen nodded in breeze so soft Leaves quaking in white branches aloft A stillness of air over creeks that flow Leading the mind to days of old The beckoned hills of light Brigadoon Imagining a trip to the face of the moon Flags flying over Camelot’s days John Carter on Mars with Barsoomian ways Tarzan in trees, with mighty yells Dragonships in seas of dark green swells This always sounds better than nine to five For an active mind is what keeps us alive To visit the stars in Star Trek drive Embracing it all, taking in stride Cardboard tanks, and swords of wood Hopscotch games and tea parties good What did we lose as we grew up Why bitter dregs in bottom of cup It seems to me that we grew down And walk around with unconscious frown Pull out the child that still hides inside To make the imagination become alive When you throw your pen and stare in space Wearing that frown upon your face Listen to the little voice which says so small Come out and play in the leaves of fall Ride the magic carpet wherever you may Ask that little child to come back to stay |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
"What did we lose as we grew up Why bitter dregs in bottom of cup It seems to me that we grew down And walk around with unconscious frown Pull out the child that still hides inside To make the imagination become alive" Oh Logan ... this is positively wonderful! Excellent cadence and rhyme ... and a beautiful message that I shall learn from right now. Just needed a little push to get me out the door and play a bit ... thank you!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Hi Logan, that was just the stanza I was going to quote. I think we grew down, you are so right. And playing is the way to go, I see it now. I refuse to be sad anymore. Sandra |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Logan, A wonderful palette, Your brush strokes are broad. In reading this picture you never get bored. Enjoyed this very much. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I hear this is really good for the bloodpressure too! This is SO you my friend! Hugs and missing ya from a busy a little bee these days--a lovely read and great advice.  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
She is a sight, her hair a bird in wind arrayed, her fingers spread out against the wood as if to make music, her skirt in billow of sail, yet, if you saw her eyes you would feel morning catch you with a child’s heart. You would recognize the sense of wonder dawning green and glorious, and for a moment, remember also. I hope you don't mind...Logan...your poem reminded me. Thank you. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
The grove was vibrant with a backdrop of green Covered with profusion of wildflowers seen Aspen nodded in breeze so soft Leaves quaking in white branches aloft A stillness of air over creeks that flow Leading the mind to days of old =================================== What did we lose as we grew up Why bitter dregs in bottom of cup It seems to me that we grew down And walk around with unconscious frown Pull out the child that still hides inside To make the imagination become alive When you throw your pen and stare in space Wearing that frown upon your face Listen to the little voice which says so small Come out and play in the leaves of fall Ride the magic carpet wherever you may Ask that little child to come back to stay ===================================== You do know that you just made us a pitcher of cherry KOOL-AID with this..right? You know ... the one with the smile on it   very very cool poem Logan .. and yes SO YOU. and about this line......... "When you throw your pen and stare in space Wearing that frown upon your face" WHO??? MOI???? NAHHHH  ROFL This distance has shown how the road remains alone |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Logan..."once in the highlands, the highlands of Scotland, two weary hunters lost their way." Yes, twas Brigadoon. The child in me knows, for she has played in the hills and worn heather in her hair. Very well done indeed. Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Red-uni Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 192Georgia, USA |
Logan loved your poem....done very well. Yes, I have that child within... I have always liked your writing. Red |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Yes Logan, Nightshade has played in the heather on the hill. I know because I was holding her hand. Magic carpet rides and Camelot...or perhaps Brigadoon? But of course dear Logan...we go there often to play and laugh. There is a child in each and everyone of us...just waiting to escape into an imaginary world...but, Brigadoon is real. I know this to be! Beautiful write as usual and most enjoyed gentle man.~hugs, Nancy~ ~Time has cast a spell on you, |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Logan you know I live in Brigadoon right? I am now and will always be a child as it is a happy, wonderful place. I loved this, and yes, it is "so you"! Try giving your smile to someone who does not have one, and I bet you'll find another ~*~ Mysteria ~*~ |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Just leave me behind in Brigadoon......*sigh* the magic of that town that time forgot is something that keeps my heart young. BRAVO!!!A masterpiece that reminds us of the magic we believed in as children. BRAVO!!! Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
Ahh, Kit, I needed that push too, hope you went outside and enjoyed..very gentle smile, thank you for your kind words Sandra, very very gentle smile, then if I achieved this, my day has been blessed ten fold.. Sy, thank you for reading and your nice comments..gentle smile Ahh, Serenity, hugs and missing you too. Advice? you know I never give advice..very gentle smile Martie, so glad you put that on there, for that is a favorite of mine. And we do think alike at times, I just can't put it in the words as well as you..very gentle smile Ahh, dear Janet Marie, surely, I wasn't talking about you ROFL, Thank you for your sweet word, gentle one..very gentle smile Ahh, Chris, Brigadoon is so much alive and the heather in your hair does you proud..very gentle smile, thank you for your read Red, of course you do, and thank you for your kind words, and so happy to see you back, very gentle smile Nancy, very gentle smile to you, of course, Brigadoon is real, hmmm, now was I one of those hunters? Sharon, very gentle smile, of all, I never had any doubts that you had been to Brigadoon. Thank you gentle friend for being here, NOW, read the story of Brigadoon to Tori tonight.. Startime, why thank you for being here and doing the read, and thank you for your comments. Sigh, it is magical, is it not? very gentle smile Vananda, to have you here to reply, always makes me feel I did something good. Thank you..very gentle smile |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
"When you love someone enough, even miracles happen." *S* I still escape to Brigadoon at least once a year for a few moments of belief. *S* It seems to me that we grew down And walk around with unconscious frown So unfortunately true... and such great advice you've given in this poem that flows flawlessly. *S* [This message has been edited by suthern (edited 10-22-2001).] |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
What we were, the way we were is wrapped in parchment, letters pure so seek to see what it was that we lost when we don't open books to see... This is wonderful...but you knew that! |
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Logan Senior Member
since 2001-05-28
Posts 1641Arkansas |
Ahh, Suthern, I am so glad that you escape there also. It does make all the rest seem worthwhile, does it not? Thank you for the read..very gentle smile Lady, very gentle smile, now why couldn't I have thought of those words? A very wonderful stanza from you, but then you are good at doing that...Thank you.. |
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DawnG
since 2000-06-23
Posts 1494United States |
I'm loving all the poetry lately that is reminding us to enjoy our inner child. Dawn |
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Lisa Member
since 1999-07-08
Posts 88Lunenburg,VT USA |
Oh what to say? I can feel the things you write, and this no less than any other. I see them also. And as always it touches an answering chord for me. Thank you. |
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Temptress
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136Mobile, AL |
I needed another smile today, Sweet One! Thank you so much for writing so beautifully, and doing so here at Passions. Its wonderful to have you around here. Here's hoping I find that child on more occasions.  Sometimes the heart needs the solace of solitude and silence. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Logan- This is beautifully penned and is such an important reminder for us all. Much enjoyed this. Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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