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wayoutwalt
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0 posted 2001-10-20 03:20 PM



I’ve seen you with no partner and yet dancing all night long
With hands in leather pockets that are my favorite song
Slung down hips and cherry lips with impulsive flirting eyes
I swore if they would fall to me I’d drop this old disguise

With much deliberation you will leave me to my whiles
For you’re the kind of woman that has no time for child
Would I tell you pretty things and maybe not deliver?
I don’t think that you are cold you just make want to shiver

Your blouse has straps so slight, left bare your slender shoulders
In my thoughts I pull out words kept neat in aging folders
Every poem that I review, once written when so alone
They come to life, that they’re for you, and how I’ve always known


[This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 10-21-2001).]

© Copyright 2001 Walt Burns - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2001-10-20 03:28 PM


Walt! Oh Yuh!  This is great stuff!  I especially like the first stanza...really great and I enjoyed, enjoyed and enjoyed again.  This is tight!  ~hugs, Nancy~


  ~Time has cast a spell on you,
So that you won't ever forget me.~

JamesMichael
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2 posted 2001-10-20 03:30 PM


Like this Walt...James
Startime
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3 posted 2001-10-20 04:29 PM


Very well done, Walt. Very visual.  I like it.  

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Dark Angel
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4 posted 2001-10-20 05:26 PM


WAHOOO Walty... enjoyed this very much, great flow! you go buddy!

Maree  

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5 posted 2001-10-20 05:53 PM


Well then Walt.....slung down hips and cherry lips!! My baby does the Hanky Panky. Good one. Chris  

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

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6 posted 2001-10-20 05:55 PM


Wayoutwalt....Tis some great poetry here.
I like the way it flows, almost like a song.

Tracey
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7 posted 2001-10-21 01:04 AM


Walt, do you know what a beautiful song you have penned here? The lady you admire is lucky indeed to have such words written for her  

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

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8 posted 2001-10-21 01:49 AM


OH oh OH oH Walt yuh know how much me diggz this poem ??? A WHOLE WHOLE BUNCH!

Psst... that rollercoaster ride in your pic that you show here looks like a total blast but I must confess I've never raised my hands off the bar device but hey there's always a first time 4everything I always say so maybe next time I'll get the courage to embark on the coaster thrill and raise my hands up and shriek out a few yuhhhoooo's  

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*~coco~*

wayoutwalt
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9 posted 2001-10-21 01:49 AM


you guys and gals are plenty nice o yuh
elisaseyes
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10 posted 2001-10-22 07:05 PM


[This message has been edited by elisaseyes (edited 10-23-2001).]

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11 posted 2001-10-22 09:15 PM


Like this one lots, Walt.
Sandra

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