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Sadness is the Spark
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Sadness is the Spark |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) 
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When my sadness is the spark, to landmines in the hills All unlucky nomads there, so swiftly will be killed If I'm at ground zero's place the number is my age And all will know without pause this canyon is my rage With burning shrapnel falling through day of crispy air Smelling certain tinge of death of skin and human hair This must be the path I’ve drawn, for many thousand miles All along the lonely way, turned down your hopeful smiles Don’t send contributions to just any cause you find You can think of multitudes that do tests in real landmines Here they all must feel the pain of secondary shame Look into the desert dust, the crosses without names [This message has been edited by wayoutwalt (edited 10-20-2001).] |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Walt, this made me think of the landmines in Afghanistan that the refugees are stepping on in their efforts to escape. I don't know if that was what you meant in your poem (cause I just got home from the pub and my mind isn't so sharp right now!!), but that was what I got out of it, and it touched me deeply. Wonderful writing...as always If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (sad sigh) My heart cries out to all these innocent refugees and I pray that something can be done to stop the production and ignition of them! (sad sigh) I heard that 1 in every 6 in Africa are affected by land mines too, it's so so terrible! (tears fall down my cheeks) Such a sad but well-written poem, dearest Walter! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Walter, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* I couldn't help but feel the sadness of this poem. You have written it well and made me stop and think about what is happening now. Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
I did want ya'll to think of the landmines as something that is going on right now and in hte poem I am relating them to a landmine being someone who is really sad and depressed and the effect they have on others that love them. The burning shrapnel is me lashing out at my friends and loved ones when I am sad. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Well, that was very strong, and sad, and a very good write! Sandra |
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