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A Sad Song : Gloom Sonnet
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A Sad Song : Gloom Sonnet |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
To whom do you sing so sad of a song, For whom does your shed tears of pain belong, And why do you remain in this dismal place With tears slow flowing down your soft sad face. I hear your sobbing behind what you sing Strumming strings softly in the cold dark night Touching emotions as she plays so light, Stale smoke filled air hangs down from the ceiling All that listen are moved by your feeling I hear your sobbing behind what you sing. The music stops and the tears keep flowing, It’s closing time and we must be going I head for home just for the going’s sake The song’s memory clings and I’m awake. Gloom [This message has been edited by Professor Gloom (edited 10-19-2001).] |
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SmartChick Member Rara Avis
since 2001-09-23
Posts 7081On A Journey To The Unknown |
This is sad. But, really good. I like it. |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
Anyone could be flip and remark that you just can't get that song out of your head, but what you did was listen with the heart, and that, Sir, makes all the difference... An excellent write. Thank you... |
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WindWalker Senior Member
since 2001-10-12
Posts 1218 |
I like this alot! Sad but very good!!!!!!! |
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sunshinemist Senior Member
since 2001-09-29
Posts 595Fl. sunshines early mist |
Sad, but good write. Thank you for sharing.  ~hugs~smiles ~Marie~ |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
For only you I'd sing a song, of shadows reaching into night. Emotions playing background sounds, as arms reach out to hold you tight. Your words, though sad, bring tears within. I cry each memory, each touching feel. While I'm awake, I join in song, awaiting til next time is real. ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Ah Gloom....this is so sad....but very very well written. Enjoyed much today. ~hugs, NancyLee~
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Very good capturing of the moment Gloom. I did enjoy this one so. On the wings of words our spirits fly....and our souls are free. |
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The Lady of Shallot Senior Member
since 2001-10-03
Posts 818USA |
soothing thoughts for this autumn afternoon... -befriend yourself and you will never be alone- |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~For it to cling, and you to notice,...huge heart. This seeps sadness and acceptance. *Peace you. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
this is sad, but a very well structured poem. I had never experienced this style before. I like it. |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* tears flow freely as I read this beautiful sonnet and yet there is such an understanding in you of the tears she sheds. Thank you for the insight you share in these beautiful words. Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
Hey, who let you into my house???!!! This could sometimes be me, even down to the stale smoke hanging about!!! (except, if I really were singing, you wouldn't hang about. Hell, even the cat won't hang about when I'm singing!!!) Seriously, wonderful writing, with deep thoughts in it. Very touching If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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