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Solitaire |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298
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Unrest takes her concentration as thoughts of desire wanton with intention toy with the unbuttoning of her blouse she resists by grabbing up a sweatshirt instead. Pulling on the hood as if the cold could penetrate she stuffs hands in pockets deep and tries to walk out the fact that this fire has found its way inside her wall of defenses. Exhaustion sets in taking her back inside but a lonely bed gives no comforting reward. Soft smiles and laughter's memories whirl round and round until the smoldering ember bursts into full flame. So she sits keeping company with the stars flipping the cards and pretending that the black King does not own the Queen that her desire for the Jack of Hearts will not cost her the game. |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
JellyBeans~ Metaphorically sooooooo cool~ 'So she sits keeping company with the stars flipping the cards and pretending that the black King does not own the Queen that her desire for the Jack of Hearts will not cost her the game.' Very creatively done~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Lady In White
since 2001-02-12
Posts 2799USA |
Ah yes, those sweatshirts don't keep all of the cold out... well done, indeed! |
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jellybeans Member Elite
since 2000-10-13
Posts 2298 |
I know my mind works differently than most...lol..but who hasn't stayed up late playing solitare to numb unwanted thoughts? thank you for your comments  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
she stuffs hands in pockets deep and tries to walk out the fact that this fire has found its way inside her wall of defenses. Exhaustion sets in taking her back inside but a lonely bed gives no comforting reward. I'm glad you chose this version to post... and even figured out why! *G* This flow suits her mood better... it mirrors her unrest. Soft smiles and laughter's memories whirl round and round until the smoldering ember bursts into full flame. I like these images very much... memories certainly can be a conflagration, consuming whatever peace we've managed to achieve. So she sits keeping company with the stars flipping the cards and pretending that the black King does not own the Queen that her desire for the Jack of Hearts will not cost her the game. So much sadness and loneliness, remembering tinged with regrets... Great job, jb! *S* But yanno... it would be worth playing solitaire with a deck of 51 to give that Black King a toss in the nearest dumpster! LOL |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Jellybeans, Nicely done, You set the mood and the brood. |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~I agree, quite creative you are. Enjoyed, and have played along in this game myself. Thank you for pulling me into that room with you, if for a moment, to feel. *Peace. |
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Domzi Member
since 2001-09-08
Posts 288New York (BK) |
This poem is so true. When I can't sleep I just pull out my deck and start playing until I'm sleepy. As my borough has always stated- Do or Die. |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
BRAVO!!! I love the way your mind works. You paint feeling with wonderful pictures that bring your words to life. BRAVO!!!! Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 BRAVO!!! OH MY GOSH, THIS IS MARVELOUS!!! (sigh) What a wonderful way to describe fate vs. heart for love in a deck of reasons cards! (big hugggssssss) You are the queen of hearts to us all, sweet friend! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet jellybeans, thank you for sharing! May love and light alwways shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
well done..as I can relate to the playing of solitaire just the other night..alone in bed...under the stars... enjoyed ~Wynter "The worst prison would be a closed heart". |
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