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Professor Gloom
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since 2000-07-23

Posts 3082
of Depression

0 posted 2001-10-18 11:10 PM

A white candle burns on the mantle dim
Dripping wax that forms pools that slowly cools
She cries alone and she crying for him
Her face with salty tears from lonely fears

Dusty table setting not forgetting
Someone whom should have shared a meal one night,
She’s just surviving his not arriving,
Cries instead of eating by candlelight.

The wick is burnt and dark drives her to sleep,
And outside shadows still haunt her windows,
Memories in her pillow does she weep,
From the dark she’s cast dreams will come at last

From before a beginning was a end,
Lost a husband lover and her best friend.

Gloom

Startime
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since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

1 posted 2001-10-18 11:17 PM

*sigh* sonnets are things of great beauty even when they are filled with the pain of loss. I wept during this read even though my soul was feasting on the sonnet that lit up the page. MAGNIFICENT. Her pain is one I share in my heart where the loneliness lives that she feels.

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Midnitesun

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since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

2 posted 2001-10-18 11:18 PM

Now you did it, made me want to cry by candlelight again. A well written, grabbing poem.

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

3 posted 2001-10-18 11:20 PM

Oh why did I have to read this right before bed? Now I shall weep into my pillow for sure!! Great write, Nancy.

~Time has cast a spell on you,
So that you won't ever forget me.~

Tracey
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since 2001-08-29

Posts 2808
where insanity meets breeding

4 posted 2001-10-18 11:37 PM

Such a soft, lovely write. You pen this beautifully.

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

Marge Tindal

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since 1999-11-06

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Florida's Foreverly Shores

5 posted 2001-10-18 11:41 PM

Professor~
Nicely done~
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
[email protected]

Mysteria

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since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

6 posted 2001-10-19 02:41 AM

A sad portrait of your woven words, which once again, was a perfect sonnet.

~I always have time to listen to someone talking from their heart~

Nature Girl
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since 2001-10-19

Posts 31

7 posted 2001-10-19 02:50 AM

*sigh* Elegantly crafted... a lonesome lament...

nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines

8 posted 2001-10-22 05:46 PM

~sighing~...sometimes the truth hurts

Me

"The worst prison would be a closed heart".
...Pope John Paul II

A Whisper's Caress
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since 2000-11-03

Posts 791
on the horizon of a fairytale

9 posted 2001-10-22 05:54 PM

beautiful...

Poetic verse nestled in the warmth of my heart, reveals the sweet yearnings of my soul....

The Lady of Shallot
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since 2001-10-03

Posts 818
USA

10 posted 2001-10-22 07:54 PM

boy did you hit the nail on the head

-befriend yourself and you will never be alone-

vlraynes
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since 2000-07-25

Posts 8229
Somewhere... out there...

11 posted 2001-10-27 05:05 AM

Prof-
   Nicely penned...enjoyed.
   Hugs,
   ~Vicky

"...until you have read the verse on his heart,
you have not truly met the poet.
~vlraynes

JamesMichael
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since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

12 posted 2001-10-27 05:49 AM

Enjoyed reading...James

DawnG

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since 2000-06-23

Posts 1494
United States

13 posted 2001-10-27 02:35 PM

Gloom,

I've been through times like this twice in my life and I can definately agree how much it hurts. Hoping you can feel happiness soon.

Dawn

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

14 posted 2001-10-27 05:23 PM

It never ceases to amaze me, that to some, one candle can be the light, while at other times, it is but a dim reminder...

a sad read...as intended...

Chanson
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since 2000-08-19

Posts 1559
Up Creek w/Out Paddle

15 posted 2001-10-27 10:05 PM

Writing solemn sonnets is one of your strengths. Another is bringing your poems to life. Always a stirring read.

Music, tonal clear & pure,
Caresses the harshest of curves.
--- Chanson deGest

Butterflies_dont_cry
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since 2000-03-06

Posts 3733
Michigan

16 posted 2001-10-28 12:11 PM

Such intense feeling is woven into every
line...a heartfelt piece, excellent work~

Poet deVine

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Hurricane Alley

17 posted 2001-10-28 12:27 PM

Very sad, but well done. I enjoyed this sir.

doreen peri
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Posts 3812
Virginia

18 posted 2001-10-28 12:30 PM

geesh
until i read the word "husband", i thought you had minicams hid in my room....

lol!!!!! nah, don't miss HIM a bit...

hehe....

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i enjoy your work, thank you for responding to mine in verse... your website is wonderful...

CocoBaci
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since 2000-05-06

Posts 3043

19 posted 2001-10-28 01:19 AM

a very touching and powerful write GLOOM...

*~coco~*

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