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Night attack on fire base Linda (1968)
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Night attack on fire base Linda (1968) |
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paladin
since 2001-08-05
Posts 930Pensacola,Fl. 
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Waiting Dark night,silent night The damp smell of new sand bags Movement in the wires Flares A flare floats gently Casting pools of false day light Images frozen Tracers Criss-crossing tracers Red going out,green comming in Acid lazer light show Sounds Deep thump of mortars Staccato chatter of guns Sudden screams then moans Aftermath Dark night,silent night My heart no longer pounding I feel so alive paladin |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
This is some pretty vivid imagery of the reality of Nam, as it could also be for Desert Storm, and maybe the current battle. And the ending screams of honesty. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Paladin...This is so very powerful it gave me chills. I take it like many others you were in Nam. Your imagery is great in this and I could smell the new damp sandbags. Great work!! ~hugs, Nancy~
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Incredible description in this powerful piece Paladin ... you've captured this moment in time with realistic clarity, very well done!  Best wishes, /Kit |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
I know you know these images well and you passed them to me greatly |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Paladin - Thankyou for sharing this chilling rememberance. Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Paladin~ Stirring~ 'Aftermath Dark night,silent night My heart no longer pounding I feel so alive' *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Vivid in every way. Bringing a night alive with awful reality. Very well done. Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. [This message has been edited by Startime (edited 10-19-2001).] |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
paladin- Wow...very powerful write, my friend. Thanks for sharing. Hugs, ~Vicky "...until you have read the verse on his heart, |
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